For the past year, you have been a member of a local club. Now you want to discontinue your membership. Write a letter to the club secretary. In your letter: - state what type of membership you have and how you have paid for this - give details on how you have benefited from the club - explain why you want to leave
Sample Response
Dear Mr Robinson, I have been a member of your fitness and wellness club for the last year. I have been benefited greatlyimmensely benefitted from my membership, but unfortunatelymembership but unfortunately, I can’t continue it because of a broken legmy broken legs. I hope you will allow meI am hoping that you would allow me to cancel my membership effective from next month. I joined the club in September 2021 and I have a gold membershipI enjoy the gold membership which costswhich charges me $45 per month. With my membership, I am allowed to use the gym, yoga classes, and physicians' advice. I have paid all my membership feesall of the membership fees onin time using my Visa cardCard and I really am satisfied with the benefits the club offers to its members. Unfortunately, last week,Unfortunately last week, near the end of my workdaytowards the end of my work, I slipped and fell on a wet floor and broke my leg. It was a severe accident and the doctors performeddid surgery on my leg. According to mythe doctor's advice, I should not take part in any form of exercise until I fully recover. Considering the situation, I cannot continue my membership at your club for at least four to five months4-5 months. Please cancelSo, please cancel my membership, and I hopemembership and I hope to return to your club once I feel fit enough to returnfeel fit for that. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, Milad Rahimi
Why this response received Band 7.0
The letter communicates its purpose clearly and develops every required point with specific membership, payment, benefit, and medical details. Its main limitation is language control: several awkward collocations and the absence of paragraph breaks make an otherwise logical response feel less polished. The highest priority is to divide the letter into functional paragraphs and replace unnatural phrases with standard, precise expressions.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All three bullet points are fully addressed with clear and relevant supporting details, and the request to cancel is appropriately direct.
Keep the medical explanation internally consistent by referring to either one broken leg or multiple injuries throughout.
Coherence and Cohesion
The ideas follow a sensible sequence from membership details to benefits, injury, and cancellation, but the lack of paragraphing weakens the letter's structure.
Use separate paragraphs for the purpose, membership and benefits, reason for leaving, and final request.
Lexical Resource
The response shows a sufficient range for the situation, but several collocations are awkward, including "immensely benefitted," "charges me," and "did surgery."
Use natural combinations such as "benefited immensely," "costs $45 per month," and "performed surgery."
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A variety of simple and complex sentences is used with generally good control, despite a few word-form and punctuation errors.
Correct the passive form in "have been immensely benefitted" and proofread introductory adverbials for missing commas.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
For the past year, you have been a member of a local club. Now you want to discontinue your membership. Write a letter to the club secretary. In your letter:
- state what type of membership you have and how you have paid for this
- give details on how you have benefited from the club
- explain why you want to leave
Your response
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