You work for an international company and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: - Explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months - Say how your work could b done while you are away - Ask for his/her help in arranging it
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam,Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing to you to request a transfermake a request to transfer me to the head office in the UKhead office that is in the UK for a six-month period3 months period of time.
As you know, I have been working as a marketing executive in your company for many years. A few days ago, it had been asked from all the employees to attend an international workshop on research methodology. I expressed my desire to attend it to enhanceattend it, for enhancing my skills, promotion prospectspromotional prospect as well as international professional experienceglobal exposure to life. Besides, I would be able to meet my friend, who lives there.
I would also like to explainIt is indispensable to inform you that in my absence, my colleague, Mr Rajeev, willMr Rajeev will take over all my responsibilities. He can promoteupdate people about the new products that our company will launch by uploading them on social mediasites. Moreover, as a fluent English speakerbeing a fluent speaker, he is able to handle calls from overseas customersattend calls of overseas customers. If any problems arise,any problem persists then we can discuss it over the phone or via email.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response is strongest when explaining how a colleague could cover the writer's duties, and the information is arranged in a generally logical formal sequence. However, requesting three months contradicts the required six-month placement, and the letter never directly asks the manager to help arrange it. Prioritize correcting the duration and adding a clear, courteous request for approval and practical assistance before closing the letter properly.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The reasons and work-cover plan are relevant, but the requested duration is wrong and the appeal for the manager's arranging help is not explicitly made.
Request the full six months and add a direct sentence asking the manager to help secure approval and coordinate the transfer.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses logically from the request to reasons and work-cover arrangements, with clear paragraph focus despite some mechanical linking.
Add a short final paragraph containing the request for assistance and a courteous closing to complete the progression.
Lexical Resource
The writer shows some range in workplace vocabulary, but several expressions are unnatural or imprecise, including promotional prospect and global exposure to life.
Choose direct workplace phrasing such as career prospects, international experience, and post product updates on social media.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of complex forms is attempted and meaning remains clear, but errors in passive construction, articles, prepositions, and phrasing occur repeatedly.
Revise structures such as employees were invited, for a three-month period, and to enhance my skills, then check punctuation around clauses.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You work for an international company and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter:
- Explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months
- Say how your work could b done while you are away
- Ask for his/her help in arranging it
Your response
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