The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000, there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on the British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. What are your views on this issue?
Sample Response
Transportation is one of the tools for human developmenthuman tools of development. That is why all countries are concerned with this issueconcerned about that topic and support research and initiatives in this field. The quality of transportation of individuals and goods strongly affects economic growthaffects strongly on economic growth. This essayThat article focuses on individual transportation and how transportation modes have been changing over the yearschanging trough years from 1888 to 2000. At the end of the 19th century, there were few transport forms and all of them were simple and very slowsimple with very slow speed except cars. The number of carsNumber of cars in that time period was not high enough to causenot so high to extend that caused traffic, fuel or environmental problems. Therefore there was no motivation to invent innovative transport systems and modes. With the passage of time from the 19th century19thcentury until now, demand for transportationtransportation demands and needs have been greatly increased. The dramatic increase in the numbernumbers of cars, especially in the last three or four decades, forces all states to buildestablish bridges, tunnels, highways etc. These different kinds of infrastructures and superstructures have extremely high costs. Such costs affect the state budget and lead to undesirable cuts of education, health and other services’ share in the annual budget. As those sectors are so vital, essential and cannot be cut for the sake of the transportation sector, stakeholders started thinking about new transport planning concepts and strategies which contribute to solving all transportation-related problems. Those problems are economiceconomical, environmental and social problems. Most of the experts in the field of ‘Urban Planning and Transportation’ admit that decreasing the number of private carsthe decreasing number of private cars is the mostbest effective way to solve all the previously mentioned problems. There are many ideas which can help reduce the number of private cars on the streetsreduce private cars in the streets like public transportation, carpooling, and encouraging bicycles as transport modes. It requires many actions and promotion to convince people to leave their own cars and use such alternative modes. These actions can be: improving public transportation, providing a discount on bicycles, giving priority to public transportation through special bus lanes and raising fuel prices etc. In summary, the whole world should encourage alternative modes and forms of transportation to compete with the traditional mode which is private cars. That will make our mother Earth greener and a better place to live in.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response presents a clear, relevant position in favour of reducing private-car use and develops useful reasons and practical alternatives, especially the budgetary impact of road infrastructure. However, it does not directly consider the proposed international laws, and its force is weakened by single-block organisation and frequent awkward grammar and collocations; the highest-priority improvement is to address every element of the question explicitly, then organise the argument into focused paragraphs with more controlled sentence forms.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response gives a clear supporting view and develops reasons and practical alternatives, but it largely omits the proposal for international laws controlling car ownership and use.
Address the international-law proposal directly and explain whether, how, and to what extent such controls should operate.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument progresses from context and costs to solutions and a conclusion, but the single-block structure and some mechanical linking reduce clarity.
Divide the discussion into focused paragraphs and use referencing and transitions more selectively to make the progression easier to follow.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a sufficient range of topic vocabulary, including terms related to infrastructure and transport planning, but recurring inaccurate collocations limit precision.
Prioritise natural word combinations and precise forms, especially in phrases about economic effects, car numbers, and policy effectiveness.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates the main ideas, although frequent errors with articles, prepositions, agreement, and sentence phrasing reduce control.
Edit each complex sentence for accurate clause structure, articles, and prepositions, shortening sentences when grammatical control begins to weaken.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000, there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on the British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. What are your views on this issue?
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