In some large cities, people have to pay a fee when they drive their cars into the city centre, in a policy to reduce the number of cars in the city. Give reasons in support of and opposing this policy, and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
As is commonly understood in big cities, people needin the big cities people need to pay a feepay some money when they are driving a car to reach the centre of the city. This has the purpose of reducing the number of cars operatingtotal of cars which operated around the city. It is believed that a policy of reducing the number of cars will bring positive and negative impactsimpact for all the people. Personally, I will explain my perspective by giving supporting and opposing reasonsreason.
Firstly, as we know that the number of carsthe number of the car in the city bringsbring many advantages. If the cities applied a policy or rule about driving cars, some of the problems such as air pollution as well as traffic jam would automatically be reducedautomatically reduced. At the same time, the policy will help the government in developing the percentage of public transportation used by the people. As a result the public transportation industry will growindustry of public transportation growing rapidly. Take Tokyo for instance, Tokyo applied a policy when people broughtif the people bring their own car to the city centre. As a result of this policyCaused by this policy, Tokyo grew significantly to become the smartest city with the lowest percentage of air pollution and traffic jam, development of public transportation reveals a sophisticated trend. From this example, we can see that policy bringsbring advantages to a city, even in the development of the city itself and public transportation business.
On the other hand, the rule requiring a feethe role by applied fee brings disadvantages for a city. In some countries this policy has an impact onthis policy impact on the automotive industry. The trend of people to buy a car significantly decreased, as a result income and development of the automotive businessbusiness automotive shows a negative trendshows bad trend day by day. This case happens in South Africa when people must pay or pay a feetake some role to drive their cars to the city centre. There are 65% of the total of the people who lived in Cape Town decided not to buy cars. Because most of them think that buy a car is useless. From this case, many automotive industries have collapsed and affected the marketeffect on the market and the economic development in South Africa.
In conclusion, the policy is important to be applied in a city related to bringing a car. However, the policy must considerpolicy must be considered the advantages and disadvantages. The government and the public sector, as well as business sectors in the transportation business, need to collaborate together, make arrangement and right policy who will bring good advantages to all sector. In this case government, people and businesspeoplebusinessman.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response presents both supporting and opposing arguments and maintains a recognisable overall structure, with relevant discussion of pollution, public transport, and the automotive industry. Its position remains insufficiently clear, while unsupported examples, weak cause-and-effect links, inaccurate word choices, and frequent sentence-level errors reduce persuasiveness; the priority is to state a definite opinion and support each side with clearly explained, credible evidence in shorter, controlled sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response gives reasons for and against congestion fees and states that the policy is important but should be carefully designed. The main ideas are relevant, though some examples appear unsupported or exaggerated and the final opinion is not fully clear.
State whether you support the fee overall, then explain what conditions would make it fair, such as better public transport or exemptions.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay follows a recognisable structure: introduction, support, opposition, conclusion. However, progression within paragraphs is weakened by unclear links, run-on sentences, and repeated references to policy without clear cause-effect explanation.
Use one clear topic sentence per body paragraph and make each example directly prove the supporting or opposing reason.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficient for the topic, including public transportation, air pollution, traffic jam, automotive industry, and economic development. Many word choices are inaccurate, such as role for rule, business automotive, and take some role.
Review transport-policy vocabulary: congestion charge, city centre, traffic congestion, public transport use, car ownership, and automotive industry.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent errors in articles, plural nouns, verb tense, agreement, and sentence boundaries reduce control. Meaning is generally understandable, but many sentences require rereading.
Write shorter sentences and check every noun phrase for singular/plural agreement and every verb for tense.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
In some large cities, people have to pay a fee when they drive their cars into the city centre, in a policy to reduce the number of cars in the city. Give reasons in support of and opposing this policy, and give your own opinion.
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