Most countries want to improve the standard of living through economic development, however, others think the social value is lost as a result. Do you think the advantages of economic development outweigh the disadvantages?
Sample Response
Living in a high standard of livinga high standard level is the ultimate goal of many people. All of us doAll of us are doing our best to live in comfort and in peacein comfort and peace. Governments try to satisfy their citizens’ material needscitizens' needs and provide them with all means of happiness and advancementadvance. To raise living standardsTo do this the economy should be improvedthe economy of should be improved.
Why this response received Band 3.5
The response communicates a simple idea about improving living standards in generally understandable language, giving it a basic topical foundation. However, it is far too short and never answers whether economic development's advantages outweigh its social disadvantages, so no argument is developed. The highest priority is to write a complete four-paragraph essay with a clear position and developed discussion of both economic benefits and social costs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response is far below the 250-word minimum and does not answer whether the advantages of economic development outweigh the disadvantages. It introduces living standards and government aims but stops before presenting an argument.
Write a full essay with a clear opinion, one paragraph on economic benefits, and one paragraph on possible social costs.
Coherence and Cohesion
There are only a few connected sentences and no full essay structure. Basic progression is present from living standards to government action, but the argument is incomplete.
Use four paragraphs: introduction, advantages, disadvantages, and conclusion.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is limited but generally understandable, with words such as comfort, peace, citizens, and economy. Some word choices are vague or inaccurate.
Use topic-specific vocabulary such as economic growth, living standards, social values, materialism, inequality, and community ties.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Simple sentence control is partly successful, but the final sentence contains a serious missing noun error. The limited length makes it hard to show grammatical range.
Practise complete sentence patterns and make sure every preposition has a clear object.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Most countries want to improve the standard of living through economic development, however, others think the social value is lost as a result. Do you think the advantages of economic development outweigh the disadvantages?
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