Fashion trends are difficult to follow these days and it’s widely believed that they primarily exist just to sell clothes. Some people believe that we shouldn’t follow them and that we should dress in what we like and feel comfortable in. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Sample Response
ClothingClothes designers overwhelm us nowadays with quicklyquick changing fashion trendsdevelopments and new trends. It's commonly thought that fashion organisers' aimthe aim for fashion organisers is purely economicis merely due to economic reasons. There are some groups in society who totally ignore these commercialised influences and insist on wearing what is comfortable for themwhat is convenient to them. In addition to the purpose of clothing to be practical and light to wear, it's quite a waste to follow seasonal fashionsmodes. In this way, our choices are limited and we have to dispose of our unfashionable outfits. Instead of discarding those clothes we could keep them and wear them in different combinations the next seasoncombine them the next season.
Among teens, clothes play a primary role in creating social relationshipsestablishments. Pupils choosechose to wear well-known brands with negative consequenceswith the negative consequences for those who can't afford to buy themthese. In my opinion, it's easier for both parents and youth to be obliged to wear a school uniform. Then students will be valued only according to their behaviouraccording behaviour and not by their newest clothesdress.
Although I am convinced that clothing companies are interested in increasing their profitsinterested in their bank account and use fashion as a way to attract potential buyers, for some fashion guidance may be helpfulit may be a rescue. Some people just have no sense ofdon't have a notion for what fits together. They need a professional eye to adviseadvice them what to buy and what to wear. Maybe also in some circles society imposes on them what to wear.
In summary, I think people should wear what they love and prefer. They should feel free to improvise and use their imagination. Society will be more colourful and diversevivid and gay if people wear what they like without certain boundaries pressing on them.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response presents a clear position and offers several relevant reasons, including waste, peer pressure and commercial motives, with a useful concession about people who need fashion guidance. Development is uneven, however, and some examples drift or remain only briefly explained, while recurring awkward wording and grammatical slips reduce precision. The highest priority is to build each reason through a clear claim, explanation and specific consequence, using more natural collocations.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses the opinion with a clear stance and several relevant ideas, though support is uneven and occasionally tangential.
Develop each main reason with a precise explanation or example that directly demonstrates why following fashion is undesirable.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument is broadly easy to follow and divided into purposeful paragraphs, but progression within paragraphs is sometimes loose.
Organise each body paragraph around one controlling idea and make the link between consecutive sentences more explicit.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient range to discuss consumerism and social pressure, but frequent unnatural collocations reduce precision.
Prioritise accurate common combinations such as rapidly changing trends, comfortable clothing and advise someone what to wear.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates the message clearly, although agreement, articles and sentence construction remain inconsistent.
Edit systematically for subject-verb agreement, missing prepositions and correct verb forms, especially advice versus advise.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Fashion trends are difficult to follow these days and it’s widely believed that they primarily exist just to sell clothes. Some people believe that we shouldn’t follow them and that we should dress in what we like and feel comfortable in. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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