Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
People have different views about the financial support for creative artistsfunding of creative artists. While some people disagree with the idea of government support for artists, I believe that fundingmoney for art projects should come from both governments and other sources.
Some art projects definitely require financial support from the statehelp from the state. In the UK, there are many works of art in public spaces, such as city-centre streets and squaresstreets or squares in city centres. In Liverpool, for example, there are several new statues and sculptures in the city’s docklandsin the docks area of the city, which was recently redevelopedwhich has been redeveloped recently. These artworks represent the city’s culture, heritage and historyrepresent culture, heritage and history. They serve to educate people about the city, and act as landmarks or talking points for visitorsvisitors and tourists. Governments and local councils should pay creative artists to produce this kind of public artthis kind of art, because without their funding our cities would be much less interesting and attractive.
On the other hand, I can understand the arguments against government funding for art. The main reason for this view is that governments have more urgent prioritiesmore important concerns. For example, public funds need to be spent onstate budgets need to be spent on education, healthcare, infrastructure and security, among other areas. These public services are vital for a country to function properly, whereas the work of creative artists, even in public places, is a luxury. Another reason for this opinion is that artists do a job like any other professional, and they should therefore earn their own money by selling their work.
In conclusion, there are good reasons why artists should rely on alternative sources of financial support, but in my opinion government help is sometimes necessary.
Why this response received Band 9.0
The response is exceptionally focused, balanced, and economical, developing both positions with precise reasoning and maintaining a clear nuanced opinion throughout. Its only notable limitation is that the alternative-funding position could be illustrated with a source beyond artists selling their own work. A brief example of private sponsorship or direct public purchasing would make that side even more comprehensive.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
All parts of the task are fully addressed through a clear position and relevant, thoroughly developed arguments for both views.
As a refinement, add one concise example of an alternative funding source beyond artists earning money through sales.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument progresses effortlessly through purposeful paragraphs, with cohesive devices used naturally and without distraction.
Maintain this concise progression while ensuring any additional example remains tightly integrated into its paragraph's central claim.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is wide, precise, and natural throughout, with flexible control of both abstract discussion and concrete examples.
Preserve this level of lexical precision while varying references to funding where doing so remains natural and exact.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A full range of sentence structures is used accurately and flexibly, with consistently controlled punctuation and syntax.
Continue applying the same grammatical control when incorporating any further qualification or supporting detail.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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