Some people think that the government should strictly control the supply of fresh water, as the resources are limited, while others think we can use as much water as we want. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
Sample Response
There has always been the most issue over the uses of water. It is all good that there must be rigid control of Management oversupplying freshwater; due to limited resources, while others consider people can use water accordingly. FromIn my perspective, due to limited resources, control over the usage of water is mandatory, as posterity will not be able to see natural resources of water, and human survival is impossibleas well as human survival is impossible without water.
To commence with, it is suggested that the governmentregime must have control over the usage of water. It is owing to the burgeoning population. To elaborate, the population is soaring, and there is a need for as much water as the population is. So if there is no control over it, people will not get adequate water to drink, and they will die. Moreover, overconsumption of water for domestic chores such as washing cars or watering gardenswashing cars or gardens, washing floorsthe floor of the house, toand name but a few, can create a water crisis. So above mentioned reasons make it mandatory to have government control over water usecontrol of the government on the utility of water. If the government imposed a heavy penalty, people would not waste wateruse wastewater. They will endeavour to assist the government by making salt water drinkablesalty water able to drink by filtering it.
On the other hand, people argue that it is their right to use water as they wishaccording to their desire. They think they pay a water bill. Hence, they can use it for any purpose. Moreover, they consider through the filtration process that rainwater can be used, so it is the state’s responsibility to provide them with this basic needbasic need at any cost. Moreover, another argument isanother strong argument explains that people get fresh water for a few hours a day, so it sometimes seems impossible to do all household chores. So, there is a need to use freshwaterthere is a need of using freshwater, and people must not be prevented from using itpeople must not be stopped using it.
In conclusion, in consideration of the above analysis, it is ostensible that to save humanity and wildlife, it is essential to curb the supply of freshwatercurb on supplying freshwater due to the scarcity of natural sourcesscarcity of natural source. In this way, future generationsgeneration would be able to see the traditional ways of getting water, and marine life can be saved.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response has a clear opinion and gives substantial attention to both views, using a conventional structure that makes the overall argument easy to follow. However, several explanations are repetitive or logically unclear, and frequent inaccurate word choices and grammatical constructions weaken precision. The highest priority is to express fewer, better-supported arguments in direct language and check that each example supports the point being made.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both perspectives and a consistent opinion are presented, but some supporting points are insufficiently explained or logically uncertain.
Develop one strong reason for each view with a realistic consequence or example, then link the conclusion directly to that reasoning.
Coherence and Cohesion
Clear paragraphing and an understandable discussion structure support progression, though connectors are repetitive and some sentences do not link smoothly.
Reduce repeated transitions such as moreover and so, and use clearer logical links between claims, reasons, and examples.
Lexical Resource
The response attempts a reasonably broad vocabulary, but frequent miscollocations and unsuitable word choices sometimes distort the intended meaning.
Use precise topic language such as water consumption, conservation, and supply restrictions, and avoid replacing familiar words with inaccurate formal alternatives.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
There is an attempt to use varied and complex sentences, but frequent errors with articles, prepositions, agreement, and clause construction reduce control.
Practise building accurate complex sentences around one main clause and edit carefully for articles, plurals, and verb forms.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people think that the government should strictly control the supply of fresh water, as the resources are limited, while others think we can use as much water as we want. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
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