Government should invest in teaching science subjects rather than other subjects for country development and progress. To what extent do you agree or not agree?
Sample Response
In recent years, there has been talk of prioritising science over other subjects for the sake of national progress. Although science is important, I argue that humanities subjects should also be included in the curriculum.
Science could be said to have been a revolutionaryrevolutionising force in improving the humanity’s material conditionsmaterial conditions of humanity and thus Deletecan be argued to justifiablyrightfully be prioritised within any education programmelearning program. Scientific breakthroughs allow production processes to become more efficient, improving both the quality and quantityquantities of goods. These goods can either be exported to the international marketsmarket, improving a country’s prosperity, or used domesticallyused by the domestic population to improve their lives. It was through improving its scientific research that the United States, for example, is at the forefront of technology and leads in economic and military prowess.
However, one might also argue that the arts and humanities should also be taughtarts and humanities should be taught as well, because they develop leadersfor they create the leaders that can effectively guide science to its most socially beneficial outcomesconclusions. Science could be said to be a tool, and like other tools, it requireslike other tools, require clear direction for its usea direction that it can be used towards. More specifically, there are many ethical problems with using scientific technology such as gene editing that requires those who can consider the potential social consequences. Without arts and humanities, science might not serve the interests of humanityserve the benefit of mankind, and might lead us downtowards a very dark path.
Therefore, I believe that although science is important, it cannot be prioritised in isolationleft on its own. As such, in addition to training a new generation of scientistsalong with a new generation of scientists, governments should also invest in educating a generationbringing up a generation of philosophers and politicians.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The essay presents a thoughtful, clearly sustained position and develops both the economic value of science and the ethical role of the humanities with relevant reasoning and an effective example. Its main limitation lies in several grammatical and collocational slips within ambitious sentences, which occasionally blur otherwise precise points. The highest-priority improvement is to revise complex clauses for agreement, tense consistency, and idiomatic phrasing while retaining the balanced, well-sequenced argument.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response fully addresses the investment priority, sustains a clear qualified disagreement, and develops both sides with relevant reasoning.
Refine the position by stating explicitly how governments should balance science and humanities funding in practice.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument is clearly sequenced, paragraphing is well managed, and links between the economic and ethical dimensions are smooth.
Reduce repeated framing such as could be said to make the progression even more direct and economical.
Lexical Resource
The essay uses a wide and flexible academic vocabulary, though a few word combinations are awkward or insufficiently precise.
Revise collocations such as quantities of goods, direction used towards, and bringing up a generation for more idiomatic expression.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A broad range of complex structures is attempted successfully, but several agreement and tense errors remain noticeable.
Check agreement in clauses involving science, tools, and ethical problems, and keep tense relationships consistent within examples.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Government should invest in teaching science subjects rather than other subjects for country development and progress. To what extent do you agree or not agree?
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