The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Sample Response
All things considered that to ensure citizens of homes, the buiding of the high-rises by far great idea. As I see it this way providing cities with flat blocks have many advantages. At first, admittedly that building new apartments isn't a far process, but building some detached housesa bulding some detached houses analogously takes a long time. As a result,In result which option is betterwhich way better? As far as I think,we need for big town choose big flats, because it's can safe space in the city. For instance, One condominium can contain more than two hundred flatsIn one condominium can be about two hundred plus flats and more families can live therethere may live more families. As opposed to house, where the space is tiny. Secondly, it's an efficient use of infrastructuresaving efficient infrastructure. The construction of tall apartment can save more resourcesresourses in one place, instead of installinstal sewerageseverage in every home. From an economic perspective,From economical side the choise of block of flats more convenient way. The next advantage of building multi-storey apartmentsbuilding multi-storey is reduced urban sprawlit's a less urban sprawl. In this way we will have more free space for other essential places and for forests. Also the important reason it's convenient location, you have your work and servicesservises near you home. Beyond any doubt the building of skyscraper have some disadvantages. Certainly most peoplemost of people will complaine about noise and little private spacea few private space, because your neighbours are locatedneighbourds locate behind the wall. Alongside past reason, the problem lack of gardens, kitchen gardens and otherothers amenities which you can have in private house. As was previously stated, as I see building an apartment bulding it's great way for saving space and environment, this is better thanthis better then building a large amount of single homes. It is a more convenient choiceIt more convinient choice for saving place for forests and nature.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The essay presents a clear position agreeing that high-rise apartments are effective for urban housing, supporting the stance with several relevant points such as space saving and infrastructure efficiency. However, severe grammatical inaccuracies and frequent vocabulary errors significantly impede readability and coherence throughout the text. To raise the score, focus on improving basic sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and accurate word choices.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
You take a clear stance agreeing with the prompt and provide relevant arguments regarding space saving, infrastructure, and urban sprawl.
Fully develop your main arguments with clearer explanations and reduce brief counter-arguments that are not directly tied back to your main thesis.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but cohesive devices are often misused or overly mechanical, making the flow of ideas disjointed.
Use standard transitional phrases accurately and ensure each paragraph smoothly connects back to your central argument.
Lexical Resource
You attempt to use topic-specific vocabulary related to housing, but spelling errors and inaccurate word choices frequently disrupt meaning.
Focus on accurate spelling and using familiar, precise collocations rather than attempting complex words incorrectly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Grammatical errors are frequent and pervasive, often causing difficulty for the reader to understand the intended meaning.
Prioritize writing simple, grammatically correct sentences before attempting complex clauses, ensuring accurate clause structures and verb forms.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
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