What discovery in the last 100 years has been most beneficial for people in your country? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.

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Sample Response

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There have been many inventions in the past centurypast one century that havehas improved people's livesthe people's life in my country. Here, I would like to talk about the advances in agricultureadvancement of the agriculture industry that has transformed irrigation and farming processesprocess more effectively with less wastage, reduced time and human effort. Firstly, traditionally irrigationtraditionally the irrigation was a human intense work and time-consuming process, like digging wellsdigging the wells, fetching the water from wells and building the passages to the field. In addition, people also dependeddepend on rain for natural irrigation, which has an adverse effect of spoiling the crops in case of excessive rainfallexcess rains. The modern inventions have enabled farmers to drillfacilitated the farmers to bore the wells, pump the water and spray watersprinkle the water on the fields quickly. These inventions reduce time and effort spent on drillingboring wells and pumping waterpulling the water and water wasted as it passeswastage of water passing over the ground from one end to another end of the field. Secondly, in olden days planting the crops or seeds was a labour-intensive processwere a labour- intensive process and consumedconsumes more time, the farmers used athe drag or harrow to incorporate the seed into the soil. Modern technology usesThe modern technology used the machines and equipment to sow or plant the seeds evenly at a desired rate that reduces the seed wastewastages and time to plant the seeds into the soil. It also enables farmers to useenables to utilise the land evenly and produce higher yields from a given areaproduce more yield on a given area. Thus, latest innovations accelerated the farmers to produce more in a shorter span of time with reasonable costs, effort and fewer wastages compared to traditional methods.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response establishes a clear focus on agricultural technology and supports it with relevant contrasts between traditional and modern irrigation and sowing. Its main limitation is that it treats a broad collection of innovations as the chosen discovery and relies on general claims rather than a specific national example. Prioritise one clearly named development, demonstrate its impact with a concrete example, and improve sentence-level control.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

Task Response

6.0
Scoring rule

The response makes a relevant choice and explains two benefits, but it discusses broad agricultural advances rather than one clearly identified discovery and offers no specific national example.

Next step

Name one precise discovery and support its benefits with a concrete example from the country concerned.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0
Scoring rule

Ideas progress logically from irrigation to planting, although the single-block presentation and several overloaded sentences weaken the clarity of progression.

Next step

Separate the main ideas into clear paragraphs and use shorter linking sentences to show each cause-and-effect relationship.

LR

Lexical Resource

6.0
Scoring rule

The response uses a useful range of topic-specific vocabulary, but awkward collocations and inaccurate word forms reduce precision.

Next step

Improve collocational accuracy in phrases about labour, crop yields, water use, and technological change.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

5.5
Scoring rule

A mixture of sentence forms conveys the main meaning, but frequent agreement, tense, article, and punctuation errors limit control.

Next step

Check subject-verb agreement and verb tense systematically, then divide comma-linked clauses into complete sentences.

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IELTS Writing Task 2

What discovery in the last 100 years has been most beneficial for people in your country? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.

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