The presence of technology in the classroom has become more and more apparent and offers students tremendous resources with which to supplement their education. Given time, technology will completely replace the traditional teacher in the classroom. Do you agree or disagree with the above statement?
Sample Response
It is undeniable that technology has been increasingly used throughoutthrough the world and also applied in a wide range of fieldsfield, and it is increasingly apparent in classroomsapparent in the classroom recently as well. In my opinion, it is not possible that technology will totally take the rolethe place of the role of traditional teachers in a classroom. Teaching is not the only thing that a teacher does in a classroom. In the process of teachingIn process of teaching, there are plenty things to do such as providing all kinds of supportsupports, supervising their behaviour, guiding their learning goalsdirecting their studying target and catering all needs of pupils. A very significant aspect of that is to observe closely and focus on the learning process including their feedback and their status. Given that students misunderstand the topic in a classroom, teachers will try their best to rephrase the topic, change the way to make it clear until students can comprehend the content. However, a computerised teacher would be less in-tune with what students need. Despite that technology does help students by providing mass information pools which break borders of nation and language, we should consider more about the process of study process in the classroom. Two-way communication between students and teachers buildsTwo-way communication of students and teachers build a comfort zone and friendly study atmosphere for each other. If students need help to deal with their academic problems and mental issues, teachers can actively guide them and helphelps them with their own practical experience which technology would be hard to duplicateduplicate it. In conclusion, even technology benefits students a lot, it is still quite impossible for it to completely take the place of traditional teachers.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response maintains a clear disagreement and supports it with relevant points about teachers’ academic, practical, and emotional roles. Its main limitation is the single-block presentation, which encourages repetition and makes otherwise logical ideas harder to distinguish, while recurring language errors reduce precision. The highest-priority improvement is to divide the argument into focused body paragraphs with clear topic sentences, then edit collocations, plural forms, and agreement.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The essay clearly disagrees that technology will replace teachers and gives relevant reasons: teachers provide support, adapt explanations, and handle emotional needs. Development is good overall, but the response is one paragraph and some ideas are repeated.
Organise the argument into two body paragraphs: one on academic guidance and one on emotional and social support.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument progresses logically, but the single-block structure weakens coherence. Several transitions are clear, yet sentence-level links are sometimes clumsy.
Use paragraph breaks and topic sentences so the reader can follow each main reason separately.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is generally appropriate for education and technology, with some strong phrases, but word choice and collocation errors reduce precision.
Use natural education phrases such as “worldwide,” “fields,” “learning objectives,” “meet pupils’ needs,” and “information resources.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
There is a range of complex structures, but errors with prepositions, plural nouns, agreement, and unnecessary objects appear regularly.
Check plural forms after “a range of,” agreement with compound subjects, and avoid adding an object after “duplicate.”
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IELTS Writing Task 2
The presence of technology in the classroom has become more and more apparent and offers students tremendous resources with which to supplement their education. Given time, technology will completely replace the traditional teacher in the classroom. Do you agree or disagree with the above statement?
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