Schools are spending more time teaching traditional subjects such as history. Some people think they should rather spend more time teaching skills that can help students find a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
School curriculums may vary from school to school, but their primary objective is the same everywhere which is to educate and enlighten students. However, some people claim that schools should focus more on job-oriented rather thanjob-oriented subjects rather than teaching traditional subjects such as art and historytraditional ones like arts and history. I personally disagree with this view and believe that traditional subjects are just as important as skill-oriented subjects.
To begin with, ‘job-oriented subject’ is itself an impreciseinexplicit term. Some would say that subjects that enhance practical skills such as computingpractical skills like computing or gardening are job-oriented subjects, but no one can guaranteeassure that all students in a class will become computer engineers or horticultural specialistscomputer engineers and specialists in planting and gardening. That is why forcing pupils to study subjects that they are not interested indo not feel interested in would have negative consequenceswould bring negative results.
Moreover, schools are meant to nurture young students’ creativity and foster their talentstalent allowing them to exploreto let them explore their true potential. From this perspective, making job-related subjects compulsoryimposing job-related subjects is like suppressing the potential of the future generation. If schools can bring diversity among students and inform them about different perspectives of life, the students will themselves choose their careers and transcend in future.
Finally, Arts and History are as much important as any science and technical subjects are. The study of history enables us to prepareempowers us to be prepared for the future and learn from our ancestors’ mistakeslearn from mistakes made by our ancestors. Similarly, artarts and other traditional subjects allow us to learn to appreciate life. We revere Van GoghGauge and Leonardo da Vinci as much as we admire Sir Isaac Newton and Einstein. The world needs great artists and historians no less than it needs talented scientists and engineers.
To conclude, schools should focus equally onshould equally focus on traditional subjects and skill-oriented subjects and nurture students’ hidden potential to prepare the next generation for leadershipprepare the future generation to become leaders, not employees with limited autonomynot corporate slaves.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response maintains a clear position that traditional and vocational subjects deserve equal emphasis, and it supports this view through arguments about individual interests, creativity, and the social value of arts and history. Organization is logical and the language shows good range, but several claims are simplistic and some word choices and comparative structures are inaccurate. The main improvement is to develop a more balanced, evidence-based comparison between the two curriculum priorities.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The position is consistent and supported by several relevant ideas, though some reasoning about vocational teaching is generalized or insufficiently examined.
Acknowledge the employment benefits of practical skills and explain more convincingly why a balanced curriculum produces better overall outcomes.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically through distinct body paragraphs and the conclusion follows the argument, with clear but sometimes formulaic linking.
Use transitions that show the precise relationship between claims and examples instead of relying mainly on ‘Moreover’ and ‘Finally’.
Lexical Resource
There is a sufficient range of education-related vocabulary, but inaccurate choices such as ‘inexplicit’, ‘transcend in future’, and ‘as much important’ reduce precision.
Use natural academic alternatives such as ‘ill-defined’, ‘succeed in future’, and ‘as important as’ and check proper names carefully.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied complex sentences with generally good control, despite occasional errors in comparison, agreement, and clause construction.
Review comparative patterns and ensure that subjects, complements, and verbs remain parallel in longer sentences.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Schools are spending more time teaching traditional subjects such as history. Some people think they should rather spend more time teaching skills that can help students find a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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