The plans below show a college café before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Sample Response
The plans illustrate changes to a college café before and after its redevelopment. Overall, several new facilities have been addedOverall, several new facilities were added to the café, while the kitchen, main seating area and toilets remained largely unchanged.
Before the redesign, the café had a relatively straightforward internal configuration.simple layout. There were two staff dining rooms in the northern part of the main seating area. A general serving counter for all food & drinkserving area for all food and drinks was located within the north-western annex adjacent to the kitchen.next to the kitchen. The central open hall was occupied by tables and chairs,Most of the remaining space contained tables and chairs, while a single rubbish bin stood on the eastern wall and the toilets occupied the south-eastern cornerwhile a bin and the toilets were located on the eastern side of the café.
Today, the two staff dining rooms have been converted into a take-away foodtakeaway food area and a coffee bar, while the counter in the north-west has been dedicated exclusively to hot meals.former serving area is now used for hot meals. A salad bar has also been installed along the western wall of the indoor seating area.added on the western side of the main seating area. In addition, a barbecue area and outdoor seating have been constructed along the southern exterior of the café.outside the café. The original bin has been replaced by larger recycling bins. Despite these changes, the kitchen, main seating area and toilets have remained largely unchanged.
Why this response received Band 8.5
The response presents an exceptionally clear, accurate, and well-structured comparison of the café before and after the redesign. Key spatial changes and retained features are highlighted effectively using precise vocabulary and varied grammatical structures. To improve further, the introduction could be expanded slightly to paraphrase the prompt context before stating the overview.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All key changes and unchanged elements are accurately identified, contrasted, and supported by details from the floor plans.
Include a brief introductory sentence paraphrasing the overall task prompt prior to the main overview statement.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is logically organized chronologically and spatially, with smooth transitions and cohesive devices throughout.
Vary cohesive markers slightly to avoid repeating similar contrast devices across paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
A wide range of precise vocabulary and spatial terminology is used accurately to describe layout modifications.
Incorporate additional precise layout verbs such as 'repositioned', 'expanded', or 'reconfigured' for even greater lexical variety.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Grammatical structures are varied and consistently error-free, featuring effective use of passive voice and spatial clauses.
Maintain this high standard of grammatical accuracy while experimenting with complex comparative sentence patterns.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The plans below show a college café before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
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