The graph below shows usual water usage (in millions of cubic meters) by industries in some countries in a year.
Sample Response
The presented bar graph demonstrates the average use of water by industries in several countries in a yearevery year. In general, the highest water useusages could be seen in the chemical industrychemical industries while the fuel industryfuel industries use the least waterspend the least water supply.
Looking at the details, the chemical industry requires about 430 million cubic metres430 million of cubic meters of ground water and 240 million cubic metres from the public supply240 million of cubic meters of public supply. This figure is accounted as almost twice higher than other industries, for instances, meal/beverages, metal and paper industry which spend only 110, 240, and 190 million cubic meters of ground water use respectively. Metal and paper industries utilise about 90 and 20 million of cubic meters of public supply respectively and they are reckoned as almost two and seven times lower than water usage quantity for the chemical industry.
In contrast, the fuel industry consumesfuel industry consumes the lowest amount of water. It only usespertains a figure of 70 million cubic metres70 million of cubic meters of ground water, about one-sixth as muchapproximately 3 times lower than water usage for the chemical industry. Meanwhile, for public supplydue to public supply, both fuel and textiles industries consume a very small amount of water which is 10 million cubic metres each10 million of cubic meters, one twenty-fourth ofalmost 24 times lower than the chemical industry's public-supply usewater demand of the chemical industry.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The report offers a clear overview and accurately identifies the chemical and fuel industries as the highest and lowest users, supported by several correct figures. However, coverage is incomplete because machinery is omitted and important public-supply data for foods and drinks is missing, while some ratio comparisons are inaccurate. Prioritise complete category coverage and compare the two water sources directly using exact values rather than unreliable multiplicative claims.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview and several figures are accurate, but machinery and key public-supply data are omitted and some stated ratios do not match the chart.
Cover every industry at least once and replace the inaccurate ratio claims with direct comparisons using the labelled values.
Coherence and Cohesion
Clear paragraphing and a sensible movement from the leading industry to lower-use examples support progression, though some references and comparisons are hard to track.
Group industries systematically by water source or usage level and make each comparison's reference value explicit.
Lexical Resource
There is some range in topic vocabulary, but frequent collocational errors such as 'spend water supply', 'accounted as', and 'pertains a figure' reduce precision.
Prefer standard combinations such as 'use water', 'accounted for', and 'stood at', especially when reporting quantities.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied complex structures and remains understandable, but recurring article, preposition, plural, and comparison-form errors weaken control.
Review countable quantity phrases and comparative structures, using forms such as '430 million cubic metres' and 'about six times as much as'.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below shows usual water usage (in millions of cubic meters) by industries in some countries in a year.
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