The graph below shows usual water usage (in millions of cubic meters) by industries in some countries in a year.
Sample Response
The provided bar graph compares the water consumptionconsumptions of seven industriesseven different industries in a year in several countries. These industries use both groundwaterboth the ground water and public-supply waterthe public supply water and it is evident that the chemical industry uses the greatest volumerequires the highest quantity of water while the fuel and textile industrieswhile fuel and textile industries use the lowest quantity of water. As shown in the chartAs is obvious from the illustration, the highest water consumption of both ground and supply water is done by the chemical industry – 430 and 240 million cubic metresmetre of groundwater and public-supply water, respectivelyground and supply water respectively. The metal industryproduction uses the second largest quantity of ground water, 240 million m³, while240 million m3 while its public-supply water consumptiontheir supply water consumption is lower than that of the food-and-drink industrylower than food and drink industry. The machinery and food-and-drink industriesMachinery and food/ drink industries use more public-supply water than groundwatermore public supply water than the ground water. Water consumptionThe water spendings by the fuel and textile industries is the lowestseem to the lowest with 70 and 80 million m3 ground water and 10 million supply water for each industry.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response presents a clear overview and accurately selects several strong comparisons, especially the dominance of chemicals and the low use by fuel and textiles. Its main limitation is incomplete coverage because the paper industry is omitted, while recurring awkward phrases and grammatical errors reduce fluency. Prioritise including every category at least once and use precise expressions for quantities, sources, and industrial water consumption.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview and reported figures are accurate and highlight the main extremes and several useful comparisons, though one industry is omitted.
Include paper's substantial groundwater use of 190 million cubic metres and contrast it with its public supply of only 20 million.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from the overview to the highest, middle, and lowest users, but the entire report is presented as one paragraph.
Separate the overview from detail paragraphs that group high groundwater users and industries relying more on public supply.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary conveys the comparisons, but repetition and awkward forms such as 'water consumptions' and 'water spendings' limit naturalness.
Use 'water consumption', 'groundwater use', 'public-supply water', and 'consumed the smallest amount'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning remains clear, but article use, agreement, pronoun reference, and sentence construction contain frequent errors.
Correct forms such as 'the metal industry uses', 'its public-supply consumption', and 'seem to be the lowest'.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below shows usual water usage (in millions of cubic meters) by industries in some countries in a year.
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