The graph below shows usual water usage (in millions of cubic meters) by industries in some countries in a year.
Sample Response
The supplied illustration elucidates the water consumptions in seven different industries breaking down the figures for ground and public supply water. OverallAs is obvious, the chemical industrychemical industries use the greatest amountlargest portion of water while water consumption in the fuel industryin fuel sector is the lowest. As is presented in the bar chartline graph, the chemicals, metal, paper, fuel and textiles industrieschemical, metal, paper, fuel and textile industries utilise more ground water than publicly supplied water, whilepublic supply water while food and drinkfood & beverage and machinery sectorsectors use more publicly supplied water than groundwaterdo the opposite. The chemical industry is the largest consumer of both groundwater and public-supply waterground and supply water, 430 and 240 million cubic metres, respectivelycubic meters respectively. Metal industry, similarly, requires 330 cubic million water and 90 of it is supply water. Foods and drinks producers need 190 cubic million supply water and the rest of the industries do not use supply water that much. The lowest amount of water is required by the fuel industry and the total is only slightly higher in the textiles industrywhile it is almost the same in textile sectors. Finally, machinery producers heavily rely on public supply water though it usesthough they use only 10 million cubic metres of groundwater10 cubic million ground water.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response provides a strong overview and accurately distinguishes the five industries that use more groundwater from the two that rely more on public supply. Most selected figures and comparisons are correct, with chemistry, metal, food and drink, fuel, textiles, and machinery all represented. The main priority is greater precision in units and phrasing, alongside one or two additional figures for the less-developed categories.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview captures the central patterns accurately and the selected data support them, though paper and several smaller categories receive limited numerical detail.
Add one precise comparison for paper, fuel, and textiles while retaining the accurate overall grouping of the two water sources.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from overview to dominant users, exceptions, and the lowest industries, although the single paragraph reduces structural clarity.
Separate the overview and organise two detail paragraphs around groundwater-dominant industries and public-supply-dominant industries.
Lexical Resource
The response shows useful range, but awkward forms such as ‘water consumptions’ and ‘cubic million water’ reduce lexical precision.
Use consistent expressions such as ‘water consumption’, ‘million cubic metres’, ‘groundwater’, and ‘public water supply’.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A variety of sentence structures is used with generally clear control, despite occasional article, agreement, punctuation, and modifier-order errors.
Check noun-modifier order in measurement phrases and add missing articles before singular industry names.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below shows usual water usage (in millions of cubic meters) by industries in some countries in a year.
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