The graph below shows usual water usage (in millions of cubic meters) by industries in some countries in a year.
Sample Response
The provided graph describes the yearly water consumption of groundwaterconsumption from ground water and public supply across seven industriesby 7 manufacturers in several countriesin some country. The figures are givenThe unit is measured in millions of cubic meters.
Overall, groundwater usethe ground water usage is far greater than public-supply usefar more than public supply in most industries. Both water sourcesBoth of water supplies are mostly used in the chemical industry while the lowest combined consumption was recordedleast consumption could be observed in the fuel industryin textile and fuel industries.
Looking at the detail, the chemical manufacturing requires 430 million m3 of ground water which is approximately twice than the water consumption in metal and paper industries. In the chemical industryIn this area, public water is also used in large quantitiesused highly, amounting tocontributing 240 million m³, which is almostm3 which is almost three times as much as the metal industry's water useas many as metal industries’ water usage. Meanwhile, the company that uses less water is fuel and textiles and each of them only needs 10 million of public water and over 70 million for ground water.
Food and drink companies use more water fromhave more demand for public supply than ground water supply, consuming 190 million m³gaining 190 million m3 as opposed to 110 million m³ of groundwater110 million from ground water. It is also true for the machinery comprises that consumes 100 million cubic meters of public water supply which is 10 times higher than the quantity of ground water.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The report gives a clear overview and selects accurate, useful comparisons across all seven industries, including the major exceptions where public supply exceeds groundwater use. Its main limitation is language control: awkward industry labels, imprecise collocations, and recurring comparison and agreement errors make some otherwise correct details difficult to read smoothly. Prioritise using the chart’s exact category names and standard comparative structures.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview and selected figures accurately cover the main patterns and all industries, with only minor imprecision about the smallest groundwater values.
Preserve the chart’s exact industry labels and distinguish exact values from approximations when grouping the smallest users.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response uses a clear overview and logically grouped detail paragraphs, with comparisons progressing from dominant groundwater use to the two exceptions.
Strengthen cohesion by making each body paragraph’s grouping principle explicit in its opening sentence.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient vocabulary for water use and comparisons, but several collocations and category descriptions are awkward or imprecise.
Use standard phrases such as ‘industry’, ‘consumed’, ‘used groundwater’, ‘received public supply’, and ‘twice as much as’.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of sentence structures communicates the data, but recurring agreement, article, plural, and comparative-form errors remain noticeable.
Check subject–verb agreement and use accurate comparison patterns such as ‘twice as much as’ and ‘ten times the amount’.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below shows usual water usage (in millions of cubic meters) by industries in some countries in a year.
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