The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Sample Response
The pie chart, bar chart and table give information about a public library in a town called LittleLitttle Chalfont. Overall, it is obvious that, in 2016, the largest proportion of library membersthe most number of library members were adults aged 18-64who aged 18-64. Adults aged 65 and over represented the smallest proportion of library memberswere the lowest number of library members. Regarding theAnd for the total loans by category in 2016, fiction accounted for the largest proportionfictions accounted the biggest proportion of all categories. Meanwhile, DVDs made up the smallest shareDVDs was the smallest share of all categories. Lastly, about total numbers of loans between 2007 and 2016, the trend was upwardthe tend was increased from 2007 to 2011, then decreased from 2011 to 2013 and finally increasedfinally increased from 2013 to 2016. The total number of loans in 2007 was the lowest, and the numberand number in 2016 was the highest. In 2016, People aged 18-64 made up the largest group of membersis the most members in the library, at 51%which is 51. Young adults aged 13-17 with the least number 12. The children and young adults aged 13-17 were 22 and 15 respectively. In additionWhat’s more, children's and adult fiction each accounted for the largest sharefictions accounted the biggest share of total loans by category at 38%, and DVDs took up the smallest share at 1%. The loans of young adults and adult audio books were also similar to that of DVDsalso similar with DVDs, which were 2% and 2%. Between 2007 and 2016, the total number of loans in 2007 was the lowest, at aboutlowest about 15,200. The number of loans increased until 2011 about 20,200 then decreased from 2011 to 2013 about 19,800. Finally, it rose again until 2016, when it reacheduntil 2016 reached its highest point at 20,600.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response successfully presents a clear overview and reports key trends and data points from all three visual sources. However, the report suffers from structural repetition between the overview and detail paragraphs, alongside frequent grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. To improve, structure the essay to avoid repeating entire sentences between sections and refine sentence accuracy.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The overview identifies key trends across all three graphics, though some specific category names from the table are merged loosely.
Ensure precise reporting of categories, distinguishing between children's and adult fiction rather than grouping them generically as fiction.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is broadly organized, but the detail paragraph heavily repeats the phrasing and content already stated in the overview.
Group ideas logically by data source and use the detail paragraph to expand on values rather than restating overview sentences.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary covers basic descriptive needs, but contains inaccurate collocations and plural forms such as fictions and tend was increased.
Practice correct word forms and fixed expressions related to statistics, such as narrative fiction, proportion, and upward trend.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple structures is used, but frequent grammatical mistakes in subject-verb agreement and incomplete sentences affect clarity.
Focus on main clause structures and ensure correct subject-verb agreement when introducing key statistics.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
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