The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
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The pie chart provides an age breakdown of members at Little ChalfontChalfron Library in the year 2016. The table outlinesoutline loan proportions based on the book categories and the bar chart illustrates the totalillustrates total number of books borrowed between the yearsbetween years 2007 and 2016.
Overall, adultsOverall, the adults aged 18-64 made up the largest share of membersare among the frequent library members, while the smallest fraction of the chart is attributed to the elderlyto elderly aged 65 and above. Both children's fiction and adult fictionBoth children and adult fiction accounted for 38% of total loans, which wereis followed by adult non-fiction(13%) and Children'sChiildren's non-fiction(6%). Adult books with audio recordings accounted for only 2%reported only 2% of total loans, along with the young adults.Also, DVDs for children showed only 1% of overall loans.
Total number reported a slight fluctuationslights fluctuage in a nine-year periodover 9-years period. Loans rose gradually from 15,000 books in 2007 to roughly 22,000 books by the year 2016. After reaching anand intermediate peak, nearly 21,000 loans in 2011, the numbernearly 21,000 loans in 2011, number reported a slight drop to 19,000 in 2013 before rebounding to its highest level in 2016.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response effectively addresses all three charts by highlighting overall trends and reporting main data points accurately. However, paragraph structure mixes the main overview with specific figures, and minor grammatical and spelling errors reduce overall clarity. Grouping the general summary separately and refining word choices will immediately improve writing quality.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Key trends and major features from all three visual sources are reported accurately.
Separate the high-level overview into its own standalone paragraph to distinguish general trends clearly from specific details.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is organized logically across paragraphs, though some cohesive transitions feel slightly mechanical.
Use more varied transition words to connect data points smoothly without repeating basic additive words like 'also'.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is generally adequate to convey the data, despite noticeable spelling and word choice inaccuracies.
Proofread carefully to eliminate spelling typos such as 'Chiildren's' and incorrect word formations like 'fluctuage'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex sentence structures is attempted, but grammatical and article errors recur throughout.
Focus on subject-verb agreement and correct article usage in data descriptions, such as 'a slight fluctuation' and 'the number reported'.