The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Sample Response
The given pie chart and the table illustrate the age distribution and total loans by categories respectivelyrepectively in 2016, while the bar chart shows how the total number of loans changedshifts from 2007 to 2016.
Overall, though undergoing slight fluctuationsexperiencing a slight wave, the number of loans increased steadily during the period. It was clear that fictionthe fiction was the most popular category in 2016 and most library membersthe most library members were adults aged 18-64 at the same time.
Regarding the total number of loansFrom a perspective of total number, in 2007, the figure was just over 15,000, and it climbed rapidly to around 21,000 in 2011. After a slight decrease to approximately 19,000 in 2013, the total number of loans rosereturned back to about 22,000 at the end of the period.
Regarding the age of library membersFor the age of the library members, the adults whose age waswere 18-64 were by farfor the largest group in 2016, accounting for 51%51 of all members. The children group made up 22% of the total number, followed by young adults aged 13-17 (15%) and adults 65 and over (12%).
In terms ofIn the term of loans by categories, in 2016, fiction consisted of children's and adults were the most popular books, with both occupyingoccpying 38% of the total loans categories. Adult fiction and children's fiction accounted for 13% and 6% of the total respectively. While children's DVDs, youngyound adults and adult audio books were rarely selected.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response successfully includes a clear overview and addresses the key features of all three visual sources. However, precision is reduced by content mix-ups in the final paragraph, where non-fiction and fiction categories were mislabeled. To improve, focus on double-checking data labels for exact accuracy and refining sentence structures to avoid minor grammatical fragments.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main trends and key figures from all three charts are identified with a clear overview, though some table data details are reported inaccurately.
Ensure all category labels are reported accurately without confusing fiction and non-fiction metrics.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is organized logically across clear paragraphs, maintaining a coherent overall progression.
Use more natural linking expressions rather than slightly awkward formulas like 'From a perspective of' or 'In the term of'.
Lexical Resource
A sufficient range of task-appropriate vocabulary is used to describe proportions and movements, though minor spelling slips and word choice errors occur.
Proofread carefully to eliminate spelling mistakes such as 'repectively' and 'occpying', and refine imprecise phrasing like 'slight wave'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response features a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but errors in preposition choice, relative clauses, and sentence boundary control are noticeable.
Check complex structures to prevent fragment sentences starting with subordinating conjunctions like 'While'.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
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