The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
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The pie chart provides an age breakdown of members at Little Chalfont Library in the year 2016. The table outlines loan proportions across various item categoriesbased on the book categories and the bar chart illustrates the total numberillustrates total number of books borrowed between the years 2007 and 2016.
Overall, adults aged 18-64 constitutedare constitued the largest share of the library members, while the smallest fraction of the chart is attributed to those aged 65 and overelderly aged 65 and above. Children's and adultadult's fiction accounted for 38% of total loans eachaccounted for 38% of total loans, which wereis followed by adult non-fiction(13%) and Children's non-fiction(6%).In addition, Adult audio booksAdult books with audio recordings representedreported only 2% of total loans, as did the young adults category, and lastly,along with the young adults.And lastly, DVDs for children showed only 1% of overall loans.
The total number of loansTotal numbers of loans experienced fluctuationexperianced votality over a 109-year period. Loans rose gradually from 15,000 books in 2007 to roughly 22,000 books by 2016. After reaching an intermediate peak of nearly 21,000intermediate peak, nearly 21,000 loans in 2011, the total number showedtotal number reported a slight drop to 19,000 in 2013, before rebounding to its highest level in 2016.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The report effectively covers data from all three visual charts and highlights the primary trends and proportions accurately. However, paragraphing and structure are slightly blurred where the overview is mixed with specific data points, and sentence fragments are present. To improve, separate the overall summary into its own distinct paragraph and ensure full grammatical completeness in every sentence.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
Key trends and figures across all three graphics are reported accurately, though the age breakdowns from the pie chart could be detailed more fully.
Ensure key demographic figures from the pie chart are explicitly listed alongside the table categories.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is presented in a logical sequence overall, but the summary overview is blended directly into the paragraph containing detailed figures.
Place a distinct overview paragraph immediately after the introduction before detailing specific figures.
Lexical Resource
A good variety of vocabulary is used to describe trends and percentages, though minor spelling errors such as votality and experianced occur.
Proofread carefully to eliminate routine spelling errors in technical task words.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex sentences is attempted, but grammatical inaccuracies like passive verb form errors and sentence fragments are present.
Ensure complete sentence structures by checking that every clause contains a proper subject and finite main verb.