In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution?
Sample Response
Nowadays, there are so many international car manufacturersworldwide recognised car manufacturers in the world and the number of cars produced has significantly increasednumbers of produced cars have significantly increased which has contributed to traffic problemswhich reflected on traffic problem, and it seems that this will never stop. Therefore, some people think this is kind of alarming and needs an urgent solution to this probleman urgent resolution of this situation. In my essay, I would like to talk about measures that can reducepreventive works what can eliminate the critical condition on the roads and how best we may improve it. I would like to indicate that almost every place suffersthere is almost everywhere suffers from the mentioned subject and big countries should implement the solution of how it could be recovered from the situation. So, it has to be plannedplan properly in terms of standardisation rules in Asia for example to makeletting private car owners to pay taxes according to the value or emissions of their carsaccording to the range of cars on the annual basis. Another possible measure would beAnother one possibly will help if they stop old cars to be used on the roads. In order to make this, we must pay a fixed amountpay fixed amount of sum as per year of every car, this will be a a benefit for the car-recycling industrygood turnaround for metal manufacturing. The charges should be highThe prices are requiring being expensive no matter whichever range or type of this car is. Then the government can spend all collected and finance to the road management and increase the quality public transportation. The disadvantage, in this case, is when you try to reduce the number of old cars, possible this will affect a majority of people who will not be able to affordwill not able to afford to buy a new car. Especially, big countries such as China, Russia, US, Brazil, Canada and Australia will struggle without transportation activities over long distancesfor the long distances. Overall, I believe that there might be the implementation of the specially designed small cars which will be cheap, comfortable and can be used for such a purpose.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The essay engages with the proposed relationship between car taxation and transport funding and identifies affordability as a relevant disadvantage. However, the advantages and disadvantages are not developed in a clear, balanced way, and frequent language errors plus one-block organisation obscure the argument; prioritise a simple plan with one direct advantage and one direct disadvantage in separate paragraphs, then express each point in shorter, accurately controlled sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The essay addresses traffic and taxation, but the advantages and disadvantages are not clearly balanced and several ideas move away from the exact proposal.
State one clear advantage and one clear disadvantage of heavy car taxation, then explain each with a direct transport example.
Coherence and Cohesion
There is an introduction, body discussion, and conclusion, but progression is weak because the essay is mostly one long paragraph with unclear linking.
Use separate paragraphs for background, advantages, disadvantages, and conclusion, with topic sentences that match the question.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is relevant to cars, taxes, and transport, but many word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural.
Replace vague phrases with precise policy language such as congestion, private motorists, annual tax, public transport investment, and affordability.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent errors in sentence structure, articles, verb forms, and clauses often make meaning difficult to follow.
Write shorter sentences and check subject-verb agreement, passive forms, and article use before adding complex clauses.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution?
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