Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced?
Sample Response
In our highly industrialised era, there is a growing awareness about the excessive amounts of trash people producing. We are about to be flooded by different types of garbage if certain measures will not be taken. This essay will explore some causes of this and propose ways to solve the problem. To begin with, different food producers decided that their products will be selling better if they will pack them in small-sized boxes and packets. These colourful and attractive packs go straight to the trashcan; the number of packs is growing along with the consuming growth. More consuming produce more waste. Government and businesses encourage consuming because it leads to high profits and development of state economy. They are not interested in using something for a long time. Society is being bombarded with commercials, pleading to buy, for instance, a new mobile phone; buying new things because throwing away old but good things. The problem of garbage is very complicated. As we can see, the government is not interested in reducing consumption. Thus, the responsibility has to be taken by individuals and non-governmental organisations. Certain laws, regulating the percentage of packaging material per tonne of the product should be established. Moreover, interesting programs, involving people to participate can be developed. For example, a bonus for not asking for a plastic bag in supermarkets or for buying extra large packs of food. In addition, everyone should become concerned about the future of human beings and our planet. If we do not wish to be buried in rubbish, we should think twice before buying things we do not need.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use correct preposition Original: about Suggested revision: of Why it matters: Awareness normally takes the preposition of.
- 2. Add missing auxiliary Original: trash people producing Suggested revision: trash people are producing Why it matters: The relative clause needs the auxiliary are.
- 3. Use concise wording Original: different types of garbage Suggested revision: various types of waste Why it matters: Various is more concise, and waste suits the formal context.
- 4. Fix conditional tense Original: if certain measures will not be taken Suggested revision: if certain measures are not taken Why it matters: The if-clause takes the present tense for this future condition.
- 5. Name packaging precisely Original: the number of packs is growing Suggested revision: the amount of packaging is increasing Why it matters: Packaging expresses the waste material more precisely than packs.
- 6. Use noun collocation Original: the consuming growth Suggested revision: growth in consumption Why it matters: Growth in consumption is the natural noun phrase.
- 7. Use general plural Original: Government Suggested revision: Governments Why it matters: The general claim requires the plural noun governments.
- 8. Use noun form Original: consuming Suggested revision: consumption Why it matters: Consumption is the correct noun for the economic activity.
- 9. Add required articles Original: development of state economy Suggested revision: the development of the national economy Why it matters: The definite noun phrases require articles, and national is clearer here.
- 10. Clarify product use Original: using something for a long time Suggested revision: promoting the long-term use of products Why it matters: The revision clarifies what businesses are reluctant to encourage.
- 11. Use concise phrase Original: The problem of garbage Suggested revision: The waste problem Why it matters: The compact noun phrase is more natural in formal writing.
- 12. Remove vague reference Original: As we can see, Suggested revision: Delete Why it matters: This phrase refers vaguely to the preceding discussion and adds no link.
Suggested Rewrites
- about of
- trash people producing trash people are producing
- different types of garbage various types of waste
- if certain measures will not be taken if certain measures are not taken
- the number of packs is growing the amount of packaging is increasing
- the consuming growth growth in consumption
Why this response received Band 6.0
The essay identifies over-packaging and consumerism as causes and offers packaging limits and consumer incentives as responses, giving the causes useful breadth. Its main limitation is that the governmental response is underdeveloped and partly contradicted by shifting responsibility to individuals and non-governmental organisations, while frequent language errors make the reasoning rough. Assign each policy directly to government, explain its enforcement and likely effect, and organise causes and solutions into separate paragraphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both questions are addressed through relevant causes and possible measures, but the government role is sometimes unclear and the proposed solutions receive limited explanation.
Specify how governments would regulate packaging, fund reusable-bag incentives, and discourage disposable consumption, with an expected result for each measure.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response moves broadly from causes to solutions, but the single block, abrupt shifts, and occasional fragments weaken progression.
Use an introduction, one causes paragraph, one government-solutions paragraph, and a concise conclusion with explicit topic sentences.
Lexical Resource
There is some useful topic vocabulary, but frequent inaccurate combinations such as "consuming growth," "commercials pleading to buy," and "interesting programs" reduce precision.
Use natural terms such as "rising consumption," "advertising encourages purchases," "excessive packaging," and "waste-reduction schemes."
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The main ideas remain understandable, but agreement, conditional, article, and clause errors occur frequently across the response.
Correct forms such as "rubbish that people produce," "if measures are not taken," "consumption produces," and "laws should be introduced."
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced?
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