It is said that day-by-day people’s lives are becoming increasingly stressful. What are the reasons behind that? What can be done to solve this problem?
Sample Response
These days stress is a very common problem on people’s lives. There are several reasons or causes of why people have more stress these days. But unfortunately, there are not many ways to solve this problem. In my opinion, 80% of stress is caused by work or economic situation, but these two are not the only reasons, study, family problems or relationship are some of the possibilities of having stress. Why is work one of the reasons? In many aspects some people are not comfortable in their jobs; that can be related to the relationship with their boss, workmates, the environment of office or the kind of job they have to do there. Some others have excessive works or some others do not have a job at all, but all of these make feel people tired, bored and in some other cases worried and finally take the people to feel so stressful. The economic situations have an important role on the stress reasons; for example, people without work, people with a big family and small salary are always in stress because of the economic reason. Study is one of the popular reasons among the students of schools and universities. Some of their problems are excessive homework, relation with teachers and classmates, exams etc. But no matter what is the cause of the stress, it can be dangerous depending on the stress level one has. Some people get sick and the symptom can be different depending on the person. I think that a good therapy could be doing some yoga, going to the gym, having a good massage and why not go for a small break. In conclusion, we are humans and we need to rest sometimes from the routine, everything should be okay if we think positive and do not give the stress the power of being a part of our life.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Wrong preposition Original: on people’s lives Suggested revision: in people’s lives Why it matters: Use “in” for a problem that exists within people’s lives.
- 2. Avoid repetition Original: There are several reasons or causes Suggested revision: There are several causes Why it matters: “Reasons” and “causes” repeat the same idea.
- 3. Formal connector Original: But unfortunately Suggested revision: However Why it matters: This is a cleaner transition for academic writing.
- 4. Natural phrase Original: work or economic situation Suggested revision: work or the economic situation Why it matters: The phrase needs an article and clearer wording.
- 5. Parallel list Original: study, family problems or relationship Suggested revision: study, family problems, or relationships Why it matters: Use parallel plural nouns in a list.
- 6. Unnatural collocation Original: possibilities of having stress Suggested revision: possible sources of stress Why it matters: “Sources of stress” is the natural phrase.
- 7. Awkward transition Original: In many aspects Suggested revision: In many cases Why it matters: This better introduces examples of workers.
- 8. Collocation Original: environment of office Suggested revision: office environment Why it matters: Use the standard noun phrase.
- 9. Uncountable noun Original: excessive works Suggested revision: excessive work Why it matters: “Work” is uncountable here.
- 10. Word order Original: make feel people Suggested revision: make people feel Why it matters: The object must come before “feel”.
- 11. Wrong adjective Original: feel so stressful Suggested revision: feel very stressed Why it matters: People feel stressed; situations are stressful.
- 12. Word choice Original: popular reasons Suggested revision: common causes Why it matters: “Popular” means liked, not frequent.
Suggested Rewrites
- on people’s lives in people’s lives
- There are several reasons or causes There are several causes
- But unfortunately However
- work or economic situation work or the economic situation
- study, family problems or relationship study, family problems, or relationships
- possibilities of having stress possible sources of stress
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Detailed feedback by IELTS writing criterion after the annotated essay.
Task Response
The response covers causes and solutions, but the solution side is much thinner than the causes and relies on personal lifestyle advice.
Give one developed causes paragraph and one developed solutions paragraph, with specific examples for work, finances, study, and mental-health support.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument is understandable, but almost all ideas are in one long block and several sentences run together.
Use clear paragraph breaks and make each paragraph begin with a topic sentence.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate for the topic, but collocation errors and repeated words such as stress, reason, and people limit precision.
Replace repeated words with precise phrases such as workplace pressure, financial insecurity, academic pressure, and coping strategies.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent article, preposition, plural, and word-order errors reduce accuracy, though meaning is usually clear.
Edit each sentence for one main verb, correct noun form, and natural word order before adding more ideas.