Some people believe that it is a good idea to continue to work at their old age. Do you agree or disagree?
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As the average lifespan is growing longer across the globe, some people are seeking rearrangement of lives and consider working at an old age as a good choice. From my perspective, such idea, if put into practice, is harmful to both themselves and the whole society, despite few benefits it may bring.
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As the average lifespan is growing longer arcoss the globe, some people are seeking rearrangement of lives and consider wroking at an old age as a good choice. From my perspective, such idea, if put into practice, is harmful to both themselves and the whole society, despite few benefits it may bring.