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Nowadays both men and women spend a lot of money on beauty care than ever before. What may be the primary reason for this? Is this is positive or negative development?

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    In contemporary society, there is an unprecedented surge in the expenditure on beauty care by both men and women. This phenomenon can be attributed to various factors, and its implications on individuals and society at large are subject to diverse interpretations.

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    Both men and women, these days, are investing significantly in beauty care, a trend driven by various social and economic factors. The rise of social media and evolving beauty standards have primarily contributed to this phenomenon.

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