The tables and pie chart show in percentage terms of the results of a survey of a new shopping complex in Auckland, New Zealand.
Sample Response
The provided charts show how people felt about a new shopping complex in Auckland, New Zealand (regarding its shops, restaurants and design). Overall, larger proportions of participants were satisfied or very satisfied with the shopping mall than those who were dissatisfied or had neutral opinions. To begin with, 17% of malemen participants said that they were very satisfiedextremely pleased with the shops and the figure for female shoppers was exactly twice as highthis figure for female shoppers was exactly twice as much. At the same time, 45% of men45% men were satisfiedreferred to their experience as satisfactory, compared with 37% of female shopperswhich was 37% for females shoppers. 20% of male shoppersOne in five men were dissatisfied withabout the shops and the same proportion of women shared this view as well. Moreover, 18% of men18% male and 9% of women9% female did not make any comment about their experience of shopping. Regarding restaurants, 20% of all women had neutral opinions, slightly greater than 15% of the opposite gender. Additionally, 21% of women shoppers were dissatisfied with the restaurantsrestaurant quality and service. By contrast,But, 55%over 50% of men were satisfied and 25% wereexactly a quarter was very pleased. On the other hand, above 30% of women felt content and less than 30% felt very pleased. Finally, the pie chart shows that 62 per cent of all interviewees were satisfied with the design of the shopping mall, and 17 per cent were very satisfied. On the other hand, the proportions of those who were not pleased or had no comments ranged between 10 and 11 per cent.
Why this response received Band 7.5
The response gives a clear overview and accurately reports almost all of the principal figures, with effective comparisons across gender and survey categories. Its main limitation is presentation: the entire report forms one paragraph, while several recurring noun-form and collocation errors reduce grammatical and lexical precision. The highest-priority improvement is to divide the account into logical overview and detail paragraphs, then proofread percentage constructions and participant labels for consistently natural, accurate phrasing.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview and accurate coverage of all three survey areas are supported by well-selected gender comparisons and figures.
Add the omitted restaurant details, especially the low male dissatisfaction rate and the no-comment figures, to make coverage fully comprehensive.
Coherence and Cohesion
The information progresses logically from shops to restaurants and design, although the single-paragraph format and some repetitive transitions weaken organisation.
Separate the overview and the two sets of supporting details into distinct paragraphs, using contrast markers only where the relationship genuinely requires them.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied enough to describe reactions and comparisons precisely, but phrases such as "men participants" and "dissatisfied about" are occasionally unnatural.
Use consistent, natural labels such as "male respondents" and check adjective-preposition combinations such as "dissatisfied with".
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A good range of complex sentences remains clear throughout, despite recurring errors in determiners, noun forms, and percentage constructions.
Proofread quantified noun phrases for missing prepositions and agreement, for example changing "45% men" to "45% of men".
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The tables and pie chart show in percentage terms of the results of a survey of a new shopping complex in Auckland, New Zealand.
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