The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.
Sample Response
The line graph illustrates the consumption of three types of fast food by Australian youngsters during the period 1975 to 2000. Overall it is immediately apparent from the graph that, both pizza and hamburgersHamburgers showed upward trendswere in increasing trend whereas fish and chipsthe fish and chips declined overallwere gradually decreased
To begin with, in 1975, the consumption of pizza and hamburgers was almost the same number of times (nearly 15 times per year). However, the consumptiondepletion of hamburgers rose sharply in the following ten yearsnext three years, approximately 80 times per year. After that, it slowly increased and stabilized in both 1995 and 2000.
To continue, the consumptionemaciation of pizza by Australian teenagersby Australians gradually increased to a peak ofincreased peak of about 85 times per yearalmost 80 times per year from 1975 to 1995. After that, the consumption of pizza remainedremains stable. In contrast, fish and chips consumption began at 100 times per year in 1975. Subsequently, there was a slight fluctuation in the year 1985. Thereafter it dropped sharply from 1985 to 2000 finish just under 40 times.
By 2000As a comparison, it can be seen that in 2000 the highest consumptiondepletion of fast food by Australian teenagersadults was hamburgers whereas the least consumption was fish and chips.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response’s strongest feature is its clear overview of the opposite overall trends, supported by coverage of all three foods. Accuracy is less consistent because the starting values for pizza and hamburgers are misstated and the timing of the hamburger rise is compressed. Prioritize checking each year and value against the graph while using precise consumption vocabulary.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main trends and final ranking are identified, but several starting values, dates, and intermediate changes are reported inaccurately.
Verify the 1975 values and describe the rises and crossings using the correct years and approximate figures.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses from the overview to separate trend descriptions, although some linking is mechanical and comparison could be more integrated.
Organize the details around rising versus falling trends and compare the series directly at key points.
Lexical Resource
The response attempts varied trend vocabulary, but repeated misuse of depletion and emaciation seriously weakens precision.
Use consumption, rose, fell, levelled off, and fluctuated consistently instead of unsuitable synonyms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex forms conveys the main meaning, but tense, agreement, articles, and clause construction are frequently inaccurate.
Maintain past tense throughout and check that every complex sentence has complete, correctly linked clauses.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.
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