The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.
Sample Response
The given line graph showsrepresents the consumption of fast food by Australian teenagers frombetween 1975 to 2000; a 25-year period25 years long gap. Here Pizza and hamburgers became more popular than fish and chips after the mid-1980sPizza and hamburgers were continuously consumed more than the fish and chips which were eaten most oftenwhich are consumed in high quantity in 1975, but after that, the figure declined graduallyrate fell down slowly.
Firstly in 1975 Australian teenagers consumed fish and chips most oftenin high percentage which is about about 100 times per year100 times eaten, while on the other hand, the figures for hamburgers and pizzaratio of hamburgers and pizza in 1975 is just 5 times which depicts that their eating rate is less than the other one. After that from 1980 to 1985, Fish & chips consumption felleating ratio gets down as compared to pizza and hamburgers which show a high ratio in Australian teenagers.
From 1985 onwardsAfter 1985 to onwards, Proportion of fish and chips continued to fallgets down and down in Australian teenagers while on the other hand Pizza and hamburgers become prominent and their eating percentage rose to the highest levelsgrow up on the top level. And finally one can say that hamburgers were ranked highest for consumptiontaken high rank in eating as compared to others among the Australian teenagers. And the hamburger graph line is just above the remaining lines.
So from this, we conclude that Australian teenagers were ate fish and chips more often than the other foodsinterested in fish and chips than others. While after few years they get interested in hamburgers mostly and also interested in pizza. This is clearly shownThis can clearly justify from the graph lines.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response recognises the central contrast between rising hamburger and pizza consumption and declining fish and chips, so the main direction of change is understandable. However, it misrepresents the early years, repeatedly uses percentage-based language for annual frequency, and becomes repetitive and grammatically unstable. Prioritise an accurate overview of the crossover, then support it with correctly labelled times-per-year data in two focused detail paragraphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response identifies the broad trend that hamburgers and pizza increased while fish and chips declined, but it misstates the early period by saying pizza and hamburgers were continuously higher. It also uses percentage and ratio language even though the graph shows times eaten per year.
State the units correctly and describe the crossover: fish and chips were highest in 1975, hamburgers overtook them by the late 1980s, and pizza rose to about 85 times per year by 1995.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has an introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion, but ideas are repetitive and progression is sometimes unclear. Several sentences repeat the same trend without adding precise data.
Use one overview and two detail paragraphs: one for fish and chips declining, and one for hamburgers and pizza increasing.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate for data description, with repeated words such as ratio, percentage, rate, and interested.
Use line-graph terms such as consumption, times per year, rose, fell, overtook, levelled off, and reached.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent grammar errors with tense, articles, prepositions, and sentence boundaries reduce clarity, though the main message can usually be understood.
Use past-tense reporting and avoid sentence fragments beginning with And or So.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.
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