The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.
Sample Response
The provided bar chartgiven illustration depicts the number of trips made by childrenchildren’s number of trips to and from schoolthe school in a country in 1990 and 2010 using various modes of transportwith various types of transport. Overall, all of the transport types used in commuting to school and home by children aged 5 to 12in age of 5 to 12 decreased, except car passenger travelcar passengers that saw an increase in the number of tripsin number of trips. Measurements are taken in millions. First of all, 'walking and bus' combined halved from nearly 6 million in 1990 to 3 million in 2010.walking and bus halved from 6 million in 1990 to 3 million in 2010. A similar downward trend was seen in cyclingA similar tendency happened to cycling reducing the total number threefold from 6 to 2 million in 1990 and 2010 respectively.reducing the total number three times from 6 to 2 millions in 1990 and 2010 respectively. Meanwhile, travel by busFinally, the bus transportation experienced a slight fall in the total number of trips from 7 million in 1990 to 5 million in 2010.
The total number of trips per year made on footcommitted by walking, which was the most used type in 1990, halved from 12 million in 1990 to 6 million in 2010 .Car passenger type of transportation, however, Deleteexperienced a massive growth, reaching 11 million in 2010 from over 4 million in 1990.from 4 million in 1990.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The summary successfully identifies the main trend and includes relevant key data from the bar chart. However, the report suffers from slightly repetitive paragraph organization and minor inaccuracies in phrasing key details. To improve, structure the detailed body paragraphs logically by category without repeating data points, and refine grammatical precision.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
A clear overview is provided and main trends are highlighted, though some data points are presented repetitively across body paragraphs.
Group related categories systematically in dedicated body paragraphs to avoid repeating data like walking trends.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is broadly organized with a clear overall progression, but paragraph planning feels somewhat fragmented.
Use logical grouping principles, such as separating increased modes from decreased modes, to improve paragraph cohesion.
Lexical Resource
An adequate range of vocabulary is used to describe changes, though some word choices and collocations are slightly awkward.
Replace unnatural phrases like 'trips per year committed by walking' with more standard phrasing like 'trips made on foot'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex sentence structures is attempted with generally clear meaning, though minor errors persist.
Focus on correcting preposition usage and article errors, such as 'children aged 5 to 12' instead of 'in age of 5 to 12'.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.
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