The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year.
Sample Response
The pie charts show the revenue sources as well as the expenditures for a year of a children's charity organisationchildren charity organization based in the USA. Overall, donated food was the main source of fundsfund of this charity organization whereas itthey spent most of their money on different program services. According to the illustration, this charity organization earned exactly $53, 561,580 in this year and spentused up $53,224,896. Its surplusTheir saving in this year was just over 330,000 dollars. The largest source of revenueThe highest supply for the charity was donated foodcame as donated food which was more than 86% of the total revenueearning. Just over one-tenth of its revenueOne-tenth of their trust was received from community contributionscontribution and the remaining 3%remaining 3% account was managed through program revenue, investment income, government grants and other income. By contrastOn the contrary, they spentexhausted more than 95% of the fund for program services and 2.6% for fundraising. Just over 1.5% of their expenditure was made for management and general purposes.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response accurately identifies the dominant revenue source and expenditure category and supports the overview with well-selected totals and percentages. The main weakness is linguistic control: several word choices are unnatural, and the entire report is presented as one paragraph. Prioritise clear paragraphing and standard financial vocabulary so the accurate comparisons are expressed more naturally and precisely.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The report provides a clear overview and accurately covers the totals, dominant categories, smaller shares, and the resulting surplus.
Refine the description of donated food as a revenue source rather than saying the charity 'earned' its full value.
Coherence and Cohesion
The sequence from overview to revenue and expenditure is easy to follow, but placing the entire response in one paragraph weakens the organisation.
Separate the introduction and overview from two concise detail paragraphs covering revenue and expenditure respectively.
Lexical Resource
There is adequate range for describing finances, but frequent awkward choices such as 'highest supply,' 'their trust,' and 'exhausted' reduce precision.
Prefer standard expressions such as 'largest source of revenue,' 'community contributions,' and 'spent on program services.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response combines simple and complex structures successfully, although article, noun-form, and preposition errors occur regularly.
Check singular and plural noun phrases and articles, especially in expressions such as 'a children's charity' and 'a source of funds.'
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year.
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