The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities.
Sample Response
The average monthly temperature of three cities—Paris, Dubai and Sydney—are shownthree cities - Paris, Dubai and Sydney, is given in the linebar graph and the data compares how the temperature in these cities changes throughout the year. The temperature is measured in Celsius. Overall, Dubai and Paris have a comparatively higher temperatureswarmer condition between April and August while an opposite trend is witnessed in Sydney where the beginning and end of the yearfirst two and last two months of the year have a higher temperature. As the illustration suggests, the temperature in Sydney is roughlytemperature in Sydney in about 24 degrees Celsiusroughly 25-degree centigrade in January which is the warmest month of the year there. At that time, the temperature in Dubai is just below 20 degreesjust below 20-degrees, which is the coldest month of the year in this city. With 5-degree centigrade, Paris at that time experiencesbehold the coldest month of the year. The temperature in Sydney remains above 20 degrees until Marchabove 20-degree till mid-March and then it keeps falling till July when it has nearly 13 degrees Celsius13 centigrade temperature, the coolest. Through the rest of the year, the temperature there steadily increases before reaching about 23 degrees in Decemberreaching 23-degree in December. Conversely, Paris’s temperature remains below below 20 degrees20-degrees throughout the year reaching 20°C in July and Augustexcept in July and August. Paris is generally the coldest cityParis seems like the coldest city among the three. Finally, the temperature in Dubai reaches as high as 36 degrees Celsius36-degree centigrade in August and this city has a warmer condition from April to October.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response identifies the contrasting seasonal pattern and reports several peaks and troughs with generally accurate figures. However, it mislabels the line graph, slightly misreads Sydney in January and December, and relies on one dense paragraph with recurring grammatical and collocational errors; prioritise accurate month-by-month comparisons, clearer paragraphing, and consistent temperature expressions.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main trends and most extrema are covered, but there are small data inaccuracies and limited direct comparison across cities.
Use exact values from the graph and compare the three cities at shared turning points such as January, August and December.
Coherence and Cohesion
The overview is clear and sequencing is broadly logical, but the report is presented as one long paragraph and some links are imprecise.
Separate the overview from two detail paragraphs organised by the rising and falling seasonal patterns.
Lexical Resource
A useful range of trend language is attempted, though several collocations and measurement phrases are unnatural.
Use standard phrases such as 'stood at', 'rose to', 'fell to' and 'degrees Celsius'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex sentences are attempted, but agreement, articles, prepositions and verb forms are frequently inaccurate.
Proofread subject-verb agreement and use shorter clauses when reporting several cities and months.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The line graph below shows the average monthly temperatures in three major cities.
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