The chart and graph below give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola.
Sample Response
The pie chart and line graph show the data on sales volume and Coca-Cola's share priceshare price of Coca-Cola brand. OverallAs is given in the illustration, in 2000in the year 2000, Coca-Cola was sold most widely in the Americassold most in America and Coca-Cola's share price peakedthe share price of Coca-Cola was highest in 1998 and showed some fluctuations. The pie chart shows thatAs is presented in the pie chart, in 2000, Coca-Cola accounted for more than 55% of saleshad more than 55% sales in Latin and North America. EuropeIn Europe, it accounted for more than 20% of saleshad more than 20% sales volume. Asia accounted for 16.4%In Asia, it sold 16.45% and Africa and the Middle East accounted for 7.0% of salesand in Africa, it had 7% sales volume. This indicates that the American continent had the largest market for Coca-Cola while this market was the lowest in Africa. Turning to the line graphAgain, the share price of Coca-Cola was about $35 in 1996only $33 in 1996 and this price increased to $68 in 1997. The price reached its peakThe price reached the highest in 1998 at about $80 per sharewhen it was $80 per share. The price then started dropping and with some fluctuations, it reached it around $60 in 2001. In summary, the American Continent was the largest market for Coca-Cola in 2000 and the average share price of it was $60 though this price varied year to year.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response successfully identifies the dominant American markets and the broad rise, peak, and subsequent fall in the share price. However, several details lack precision: Africa is separated from the Middle East, the Asian figure is misstated, the 1997 price is oversimplified, and the final claim about a $60 average is unsupported. Prioritize exact category labels and distinguish individual plotted points from overall averages.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The report presents the main market shares and price trend with a clear overview, but several labels, figures, and interpretations are imprecise.
Report the full Africa and Middle East label, use the exact Asian share, and remove the unsupported average-price claim.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response moves logically from the overview to regional sales and then share prices, although repetition and limited paragraphing reduce fluency.
Use separate paragraphs for the overview, sales distribution, and price movement, with fewer repeated framing phrases.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient vocabulary for describing proportions and trends, but several collocations and references are awkward.
Use more natural phrases such as accounted for sales, market share, and its share price.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied sentence forms and remains clear, though awkward clauses and pronoun references recur.
Revise structures such as reached it around and share price of it, and tighten article and reference choices.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The chart and graph below give information about sales and share prices for Coca-Cola.
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