The plans below show a college café before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
Sample Response
This pictures describepicures describes a college cafe layoutview before and after reconstruction.
Overall, we could see some major changes. Tables and chairschair area modified significantlysignificulty. Some new sections were addedsection added and existing ones were rebuiltexisting rebuilt. The new outdoor area appeared.
First picture shows the cafécare before redesign. We could see a kitchen in the top right corner near to the top wall if you walk from the entrance door. There was a smallsmal serving area for all food and drinks inside it. Tables and chairs were located in the middle of the cafe. Staff dining rooms were attachedassebled to the main area. Toilets were located in the left bottom side. The bin stoodstand between toilets and main door.
Second image presents how the cafépresents how cafe looks today. Kitchen area was not replaced. However, serving area was replaced by Hot meals area. Staff dining rooms were redesignedredisigned. First room is now theroom now the Take away food area, second the coffeecoffe bar. Toilets werewas not changed, but one bin became a group of recycling bins. We could see salad bar added to the tables area. Two new doors appeared. These are the doors to the outdoor seating space. Barbecue section was constructed into this area.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response successfully identifies the key structural developments in the café layout and includes a clear overview paragraph. However, persistent grammatical inaccuracies and frequent spelling errors reduce overall clarity and precision. Prioritizing correct verb tenses, passive forms, and basic spelling will yield the highest immediate improvements in overall readability.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main changes between the two plans are identified, and a general overview of the redesign is provided.
Ensure spatial descriptions are accurate by double-checking locations against the map layout (e.g., toilets are in the bottom right corner, not bottom left).
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay follows a logical progression from the overview to descriptions of the past and present layouts.
Use more varied transition words instead of simple formulaic stage markers like 'First picture shows' and 'Second image presents'.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficient to convey the visual information, but frequent spelling mistakes and limited word choices are present.
Carefully review basic vocabulary spelling (e.g., 'pictures', 'significantly', 'small', 'coffee') before finishing the report.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Multiple grammatical errors occur in sentence structure, verb agreement, and passive voice formations.
Practice forming complete passive sentences (e.g., 'a new section was added') and ensuring subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'toilets were not changed').
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The plans below show a college café before it was redesigned and how it looks now.
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