The graph below presents the number of different airline flights coming to Hong Kong per week in 1980 and 2000.
Sample Response
The graph compares the number of weekly flights operated by different airlinesnumber of flights from different airlines that arrived in Hong Kongreached to Hong Kong per week in 1980 and 2000. Generally speaking, the number of flights in 2000 remarkably increased and the highest number of flights to Hong Kong came from Thailand, Malaysia and Singapore. As shownAs is given, Japan Airlines had 12 flights to Hong Kong per week in 1980Hong Kong in a week in 1980 and this figure trebled over the next 20 yearsit trebled in just 20 years. Over the same periodDuring this time, the number of Cathay Pacific flights doubled from 8 to 16 per weekCathay Pacific's flight doubled from its initial 8 weekly flights. Dragon Air operated no flights to Hong Konghad no operation in Hong Kong in 1980 but in 2000, it had 10 weekly flights to Hong Kong. Thai Airways, Malaysia Airlines and Singapore AirwaysThai, Malaysian and Singaporean Airlines operated a substantial number of flightsflew a significant number of flights to Hong Kong in 2000, andto Hong Kong in 2000 and their numbersnumber of weekly flights were 45, 44 and 43 respectivelyrespective. These numbers were 3 to 4 times higher than that of 2 decades ago. While the number of Korean Air flightsflights from Korean Air roughly doubled from 11 to 23 per weekfrom 11 to 23 flights in a week, Canadian AirAirs flew 5 flights per week in 2000 compared to only 2 in 1980.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response selects all eight airlines, reports the figures accurately, and provides a useful overview of the universal rise and the leading carriers in 2000. Its main weakness is recurrent awkwardness in collocation, agreement, and reference, although meaning remains clear. Prioritize more natural comparative phrasing and consistent plural forms when describing airline services and flight numbers.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response presents a clear overview and accurately covers the main values and changes for every airline in the chart.
Make the comparison among the three leading carriers more exact by relating each 2000 value directly to its 1980 figure.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information moves coherently from the overview to individual airlines and then grouped comparisons, with effective sequencing throughout.
Use clearer grouping and paragraphing to separate the lower-volume carriers from the three largest increases.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a good range of vocabulary for change and comparison, though several word choices and collocations are awkward.
Use natural phrases such as flights reached Hong Kong, rose markedly, and respectively, while preserving accurate airline names.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of simple and complex sentences communicates the data clearly, but agreement, plural, and comparative-form errors recur.
Check noun-number agreement and reference carefully, especially in phrases involving flights, their numbers, and comparisons with earlier figures.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below presents the number of different airline flights coming to Hong Kong per week in 1980 and 2000.
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