The process shows how plants create food. The process describes how plants produce food for themselves. The whole process entails seven steps starting from rainfall and ending in the production of sugar which is then converted to starch and used for the growth and repair of the plant.
Sample Response
In the first place, the plant's rootsthe root of the tree absorbs water from rainfallis wet by the fall of the rain, which allows minerals from the soilactivates the minerals in the soil to enter through the rootsmove up across the root and reach the leavesunto the leaves of the plant. At the same timeAt this point, the plantthe plant, through its own natural process for the exchange of gases, absorbs carbon dioxidetakes in carbon dioxide from the atmosphere.
During food productionIn the final stage of food production, sunlightthe appearance of the sunlight provides energy for food productionhelps in the exchange of gases, whereas taking in carbon dioxide and releasing oxygengiving out oxygen into the atmosphere, which is used by humans. As a resultAfter this, the leaves produce sugarthere is the production of sugar by the leaves, which is then converted to starch and used byb the plant for growth and repairthe repair of its leaves.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response communicates a broadly understandable sequence and mentions nearly all the inputs and outputs shown, including water, minerals, carbon dioxide, sunlight, oxygen, sugar, and starch. Its main limitation is that it is under length and offers no clear overview, while some stage relationships are expressed inaccurately or vaguely. The highest priority is to add a concise overview and explain each input and output in a precise, logically ordered sequence.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response identifies most visual elements but lacks an overview, falls below the required length, and explains some relationships imprecisely.
Add a clear overall summary and describe the process accurately from water and mineral uptake through photosynthesis to starch formation.
Coherence and Cohesion
The two paragraphs broadly follow the process, but the jump to the final stage and repeated discussion of gas exchange weaken progression.
Organise the description in a continuous stage-by-stage sequence and use linking expressions that show how each input leads to the next output.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is sufficient to describe the process, although awkward combinations such as 'wet by the fall of the rain' reduce precision.
Use more natural process language, such as 'absorbs water and minerals' and 'converts sugar into starch,' while avoiding unnecessary repetition.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses some complex structures, but faulty clause construction, unclear relative clauses, and a spelling error reduce control.
Practise complete subordinate clauses and check pronoun references so that each cause-and-effect relationship is grammatically clear.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The process shows how plants create food. The process describes how plants produce food for themselves. The whole process entails seven steps starting from rainfall and ending in the production of sugar which is then converted to starch and used for the growth and repair of the plant.
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