The line graph shows the past and projected finances for a local authority in New Zealand.
Sample Response
The line chart compares the millions of dollar of four different finances for a native dominance from the past and make an estimated outcome in New Zealand over a period of 10 years from 2012 to 2022 and projected year in 2030.
Overall, it is immediately apparent from the line graph that increases and decreases as millions of dollars from the four several categories and keeps predictions of the upward trend observed in the two major departments are rates revenue and user charges.
At the beginning of the period, in 2012, the rates revenue stood atrates revenue accounted for nearly $1400 million whereas this trend climbed upwards and it reached about $2,000 millionfinances reached with shares $2000 million in 2020 and this figure then rose to about $2,350 million in 2022this revenue would be surged up at above $500 million in the ending financial year of 2030. However, user chargesthe term of user charges follows the same trend as rates revenue at $1,000 millionwith shares of $1000 million. Over the next five years, the figure for user chargesfunds for local regimes rose to about $1,500 millioncrossed the barrier, which accounted for $1500 million and then reached approximately $2,000 millionskyrocketed would be assumed to approximately more than $2000 million in the final year shownending year of June 30.
Furthermore, borrowings are the most variable source of financemost fluctuated finance department for authority in New Zealand which stoodaccounted at below $1000 million in 2012 and rose slightlyslightly got inclined by $100- $200 million after two years but then fell sharply todrastically plummeted at $600 million and fluctuated over the next six yearswent in free fall for next six years and reached $800 million in 2022 and was shown at roughly the same value in 2022projected would be the same value on June 30. It iss interesting to note that grants and subsidies have the lowest amount of fundingleast number of finances in New Zealand, with a low value at $400 million and rising gradually to about $450 million in 2015 and ending at roughly the same level in 2022remaining unchanged until 2015 with shares of $700 million and a predicted $500 million after eight years.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response addresses all four financial streams and groups the two steadily rising sources separately from the more variable ones. However, it misreads the chart’s time frame, repeatedly invents 2030, and reports several trends and figures inaccurately, while convoluted wording often obscures the comparisons. The main priority is to read the axes precisely and build each paragraph around a small number of accurate start, peak, and end values.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All four series are mentioned and the two principal upward trends are recognized, but the overview is incomplete and numerous years, values, and movements are inaccurate.
Use 2012–2022 as the displayed period and accurately highlight the steady rises in rates and user charges, the 2020 borrowing peak, and the later fall in grants.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has an introduction, overview, and grouped detail paragraphs, but very long sentences and unclear reference chains disrupt progression.
Organize the details by trend and use shorter sentences that compare no more than two clearly named series at a time.
Lexical Resource
Some trend vocabulary is attempted, but frequent unsuitable collocations such as ‘native dominance,’ ‘shares,’ and ‘finance department’ make descriptions imprecise.
Use conventional chart language such as ‘local authority,’ ‘revenue source,’ ‘rose steadily,’ ‘peaked at,’ and ‘fell to.’
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex structures are attempted, but errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, prepositions, and clause construction are frequent and sometimes impede meaning.
Build accurate subject-verb-value sentences first, then add controlled comparison clauses instead of stacking multiple faulty structures together.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The line graph shows the past and projected finances for a local authority in New Zealand.
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