The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100,000 people asking if they traveled abroad and why they traveled for the period 1994-98. The second chart shows their destinations over the same period.
Sample Response
The provided charts show the data fromof a survey conducted on 100,000 people and the statistics showshows the number of UK citizens who travelledthe number of UK citizen travelled abroad fromduring 1994 to 1998 for different purposes and their destinations. As is observed from the given graphs, most of the UK residents travelled on their holidays and Western Europe was their favourite destinationtheir most favourite destination. Initially, in 1994, more than 22,000 UK residents22 thousand UK resident travelled to different foreign countriestraveled different foreign countries and among them, more than 15 thousand travelled for holidayswent on their holidays. For business tripstours, more than 3 thousand people travelled abroadtravelled in other countries in the same year while more than 2 thousand people visited their friends and relatives. In 1995After 1 year, the total number slightly decreasedthis number slightly decreased and from 1996 to 1998for the rest of the years until 1998, the number steadily increased in almost all of the categories. Finally, in 1998, the total number of travellerstotal traveler number rose to more than 28,000reached to more than 28 thousand and among them, more than twenty thousand people travelled to enjoy their holidays. In 1994, about 19,000almost 18 thousand people out of 22 thousand went to Western Europe which is significantly larger than the number of people who travelled to North Americapeople traveled to North America and other parts of the world. Similar trendsThe similar trends can be observed for the remaining years and the majority of UK residentsthe majority people of the UK went to Western Europe which makes this place the most popular destination for UK residentsmost popular tourist’s destination of UK people.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response presents a clear overview of the dominant travel purpose and destination, and it communicates the main rise after 1995 with relevant figures from both visuals. Its coverage of the destinations chart is rather thin and includes an inaccurate 1994 Western Europe figure, while frequent grammatical and collocational slips reduce polish; the priority is to select a few more precise destination comparisons and proofread agreement, articles, and noun phrases.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main trends and dominant categories are identified with relevant support, but destination coverage is limited and the 1994 Western Europe figure is understated.
Add accurate start-to-end comparisons for Western Europe, North America, and other areas rather than relying mainly on a general trend statement.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information follows a broadly logical path from purpose to destination, but the entire report is presented as one paragraph and some references are vague.
Use a distinct overview and separate detail paragraphs for purposes and destinations, ensuring phrases such as “this number” have an unmistakable reference.
Lexical Resource
The response uses an adequate range of travel and trend vocabulary, but repetition and awkward combinations such as “reached to” and “majority people” reduce naturalness.
Replace repeated forms with precise combinations such as “the total reached,” “the majority of residents,” and “travelled for business.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex sentences are attempted and meaning remains clear, but agreement, article, plural, and preposition errors occur regularly.
Edit each sentence for subject-verb agreement and complete noun phrases, especially “the statistics show,” “UK residents,” and “the majority of UK residents.”
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100,000 people asking if they traveled abroad and why they traveled for the period 1994-98. The second chart shows their destinations over the same period.
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