The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas.
Sample Response
The line graph shows wheat exportselucidates the wheat exportation of three regions, namely Canada, Australia and the European CommunityEuropean community from 1985 to 1990. As can be seen, Canada was the largest wheat exporterleader in wheat trading throughtill 1988 and after that, the European Community became the leading wheat exporter among the given regions. Initially, in 1985, Canada exported the highest quantity of wheat at approximately 19 million tonneswhich was approximately 19 million tonnes. The wheat export in this year by the European Community was about 17 million tonnes and finally, 15 million tonnes of Australia exported wheatwheat was traded by Australia in this year. Next year, Australia's exports rose slightlyonly Australia managed to export more wheat than the previous year's quantity, while it declined in the case of Canada and the European Community. In the next two years (1987 and 1988), the amountIn the next two years (1987 and 1988) the amount of wheat exported by Canada rose sharply and reachedrocketed and reached to 25 million tonnes while the European Community recorded about 15 million tonnes in both yearswhile it was 15 million tonnes for the European Community and about 14 million tonnes in 1987 and 13 million in 1988 for Australiafar less for Australia. In 1989, the amount of Canada's wheat exportswheat export by Canada dropped very sharply while the European Community's exports roseit was quite the opposite for the European Community. The final year's export figure shows that the European Community shippedshows that European Community shipped just over 20 million tonnes of wheat compared to Canada's just below 20 million tonnes. In this year Australia exportedconsigned just over 10 million tonnes of wheat.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The report presents a clear overview, selects the principal changes, and compares all three exporters with mostly accurate figures. Its main weakness is that several descriptions are imprecise or slightly inaccurate, especially Australia’s 1986 movement and the values for 1987–88, while some word choices are forced. Improve by checking each plotted point and using conventional, precise trend language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The main trends and leadership change are clearly identified, and all series are covered, though a few values and movements are inaccurately described.
Verify individual data points, especially Australia in 1986 and the three 1987–88 figures, before finalising comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information progresses logically from the overview through the years, with effective comparisons, although the single paragraph and repeated time openers limit readability.
Separate the overview from two detail paragraphs and group the early and later years rather than narrating every point in one block.
Lexical Resource
Trend vocabulary is varied and generally effective, but a few items such as elucidates, trading, consigned, and reached to are unnatural in this context.
Use standard chart-report vocabulary and avoid replacing simple accurate words with less natural synonyms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex sentences are handled with generally good control, while occasional article, punctuation, agreement, and preposition errors remain.
Proofread articles and prepositions and insert commas after introductory time phrases.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas.
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