The pie charts below give data on the spending and consumption of resources by countries of the world and how the population is distributed.
Sample Response
The pie charts below provide information about the global population and spending and consumption of resources based on the categories shownthe different factors.
The world-spending chartfirst Pie chart shows global spendingthe spending of people with 24% spentas mentioned people spend 24% on food and 18% on transport. Spending on housinghouses is 12%, 6% on clothinghalf on clothing and the remaining 40% on other categoriesresources. In comparisonMoving ahead, the USA and EuropeUSA & Europe consume resources totalling 60% of the world's resources60% of the world and the remaining 40% is consumed by other countriesremaining 40% by other nations.
Asia has the largest share of the world's populationmost highly populated part of the world, accounting for 57%which covers more than half of the world population, which is 57%, and Africa covers 10%. Europe and America each accountBoth Europe and America equally contributed to the world’s population by 14% while other regions account for 5%and 5% by the other nations.
Overall, the USA and Europe have the same population and use the same number of resources, which is more than the other nations and Asia, which has the highest region in population, uses far fewer resources thanuses very few resources than other countries.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response covers all three charts and reports most figures accurately, with a generally clear comparison between population shares and resource use. Its main limitation is an imprecise overview that treats the combined USA-and-Europe consumption figure as if the two regions used equal amounts, while several awkward sentences blur comparisons. Prioritise a fully accurate overview that contrasts Asia's population dominance with the disproportionate resource consumption of the USA and Europe.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The report addresses all three charts and includes most key percentages, but the overview makes an unsupported claim about equal resource use by the USA and Europe.
State only comparisons supported by the grouped data, emphasising Asia's large population share against the USA and Europe's combined 60% resource consumption.
Coherence and Cohesion
Information is grouped by chart and progresses clearly, although some long sentences contain loosely connected comparisons and repetitive wording.
Use shorter comparison sentences and clearer referencing so each relationship between regions, population, and consumption is immediately evident.
Lexical Resource
The response uses an adequate range of data-reporting vocabulary, but collocations such as “highest region in population” and “very few resources than” are imprecise.
Use conventional comparative phrases such as “largest share of the population” and “consumes far fewer resources.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex forms is attempted, but recurring article, agreement, and clause-structure errors reduce control.
Check subject-verb agreement and restructure overloaded relative clauses into complete, accurately punctuated sentences.
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The pie charts below give data on the spending and consumption of resources by countries of the world and how the population is distributed.
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