The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
Sample Response
The supplied pie charts depict populations of different ages in Yemen and Italy in 2000 and give predictions for 2050 based on people’s age. In general, both countries, Yemen and Italy, are forecasted to have people aged 15–59adolescent and adult as the majority of each populationthe vast majority of populations in 2050.
Looking at the details, in Yemen in 2000, children and teens accounted for the largestaccounted the biggest proportion of the populationproportion of citizen, 50.1%. In contrast, senior population was the smallest proportion of the populationthe lowest proportion of population, only 3.6%. Meanwhile, young adults and adults made up 46.3%amassed 46.3% of total population. However, it is predicted that in 2050, the number of adult population will dominate significantly the proportion of people abiding in Yemen, 57.3% and approximately 10% higher than in 2000. By contrastVice versa, percentage of people aged 0-14 years will decreasewill be decreased to 37%, 13.1 percentage points lowerabout 13% lower than in 2000. Seniors will remainwill be remained as the smallest proportionthe tiniest fraction among all age categories, only 5.7% in 20502002.
Meanwhile, In Italy, adult reckoned the highest 61.6% of the total citizen in 2000, followed by the elderly people's percentage which came in the second place, 24.1% and toddlers and children counted only 14.3%. In 2050, it is forecasted that the adult population will stilladult population will still be the largest proportion, at 46.2%the highest proportion, 46.2% and the proportionnumber of seniors will be about 42.3%, almost twice as high asalmost twice higher than in 2000. On the other hand, children’s percentage will declinewill be declined to only 11.5%.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response reports almost all percentages accurately and organizes the details clearly by country. Its main limitation is an imprecise overview that misses the contrasting age profiles and Italy’s pronounced ageing, while recurring collocation and grammatical errors reduce control. Prioritize a sharper comparative overview, then edit noun forms, articles, agreement, and passive constructions so the accurate data is expressed more naturally.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The response accurately covers nearly all figures and main changes, but the overview is vague and the Yemen projection is once mislabeled as 2002.
State the central contrast explicitly: Yemen remains comparatively young, whereas Italy’s elderly share rises sharply and approaches its working-age share.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction, overview, and country-based detail paragraphs create clear progression, although some linking expressions are mechanical or misused.
Use simpler, accurate transitions and make each comparison follow directly from the preceding figure.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient range for describing proportions and projections, but frequent awkward choices such as “amassed,” “abiding,” and “adult reckoned” weaken precision.
Prefer standard Task 1 collocations such as “accounted for,” “comprised,” “was projected to rise,” and “the working-age population.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of sentence forms conveys the meaning clearly, but article, plural, agreement, and passive-form errors recur throughout.
Review countable nouns and avoid incorrect passives such as “will be remained” and “will be declined.”
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IELTS Academic Writing Task 1
The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
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