For the past year, you have been a member of a local club. Now you want to discontinue your membership. Write a letter to the club secretary. In your letter: - state what type of membership you have and how you have paid for this - give details on how you have benefited from the club - explain why you want to leave
Sample Response
Dear Mrs Watson, I am a full-time Gold member of your club 'Fitness Shield'. My membership started a year ago, on 5th August 2024, and it is valid for another six months. I have paid all my dues including the security deposit of $250 through my City Bank savings accountusing my savings account with City Bank. I would now like to ask youNow I would request you to cancel my membership and refund the remaining amount after deducting the next three months' feesrefund me the amount after deduction of the next three months' fees. In addition, your well-equipped clubNot to mention, your well-equipped club has offered me considerableenormous benefits so far. The wide range of sports and fitness activities has helped me regain my lean physiqueregain my lean body shape again. The instructors have been very professionalThe instructors were very professional and with their help, I have adopted a suitable, healthy dietfound a perfect and healthy diet. The outdoor activities were phenomenal and the lawn tennis coach taught me how to play one of my favourite sports. I regret thatIt is a regret that I am requiredbound to cancel my club membership with effect from 1 Decemberfrom 1st December. I have recently been transferred to Edinburgh and I am left with no choice but to move there at the end of November. I would, therefore, request you to cancel my membership and refund my security deposit and any remaining balance after the deductionsany fee left after the deduction. Kindly deposit it intoto the bank account number 1123456, Barclays Bank, Oxford Street, London. Thank you for the excellent club facilitiesThanks for such a great club and I wish the club every successI wish every success of it. Yours sincerely,
Emma Fiona
Why this response received Band 7.5
The letter covers the membership type, payment details, club benefits, and relocation reason thoroughly, while making the cancellation date and refund request clear. Its strongest feature is the specific, courteous explanation of benefits received; the main limitation is repetition and a few unnatural expressions around refunds, fitness, and the closing. Prioritise a concise cancellation request with exact refund terms and polished formal phrasing.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
All required points are fully developed with clear dates, payment information, specific benefits, and a convincing reason for leaving, alongside an appropriate administrative request.
State the requested refund calculation once and clarify exactly which prepaid fees should be returned after cancellation.
Coherence and Cohesion
The message progresses clearly through membership details, benefits, reason for departure, refund instructions, and closing, though cancellation and refund requests are repeated.
Group the administrative details into one concise opening paragraph and reserve the final paragraph for the relocation reason and requested action.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a good range of membership, fitness, and administrative vocabulary, but some expressions are redundant or unnatural.
Use concise phrases such as 'regain fitness,' 'received dietary guidance,' 'remaining prepaid fees,' and 'wish the club continued success.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A variety of structures communicates the details accurately, with occasional article, preposition, tense, and reference issues that do not impede meaning.
Check prepositions in refund instructions and maintain consistent tense when describing benefits received during the membership.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
For the past year, you have been a member of a local club. Now you want to discontinue your membership. Write a letter to the club secretary. In your letter:
- state what type of membership you have and how you have paid for this
- give details on how you have benefited from the club
- explain why you want to leave
Your response
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