You celebrated your birthday with some friends last week in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed the evening very much. Write a letter to the restaurant. In your letter: - thank the restaurant for the successful evening - mention the food, service and atmosphere - suggest improvements that could make things better

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Sample Response

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Dear Sir or Madam, Last week I celebrated my 31st birthday at your restaurant and I am writing to express my appreciation forregarding the service we were offered. It gives me immense pleasure to thank you all for making the party enjoyable for usletting us enjoy the party from the very beginning. The interior and atmosphere of the restaurant wereThe interior and the atmosphere in the restaurant was commendable. It uplifted our mood and helped us enjoy the evening to the fullestinspired us to enjoy to the fullest. Besides, all your staffall of your staff, right from the hostthe welcome guy to the serversstewardess, were so cordial that we felt at homefelt a homely appeal. Needless to saymention, the party was a memorable occasionan excellent memoir that we will remember for a long timeto be remembered for a long. The dishes were delicious and theyThe food tasted delicious and they were properly cooked and presented. I was so happy when my friends saidquoted that they enjoyed the disheshad an excellent dish and ate until they were fullate up to their full stomach. I would not hesitate to recommend your establishment to any food lover. I take this opportunityI, take this opportunity to offermark this letter as a token of appreciation for the success of the birthday party. However, I would like to mention that you might consider enlarging the washroomyou need to enhance the washroom as it is a bit smaller compared to the number of guests you entertain. Thank you once again for everything you have done to make my birthday party a success. Yours faithfully, Prasadarao Talluri

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.5

The response warmly thanks the restaurant and covers the atmosphere, staff, food, and a concrete washroom improvement, creating a complete and appropriately appreciative message. Its main limitation is the frequency of unnatural word combinations, which sometimes makes otherwise clear praise sound imprecise. The priority is to preserve the detailed coverage while replacing awkward expressions and dividing the long text into coherent letter paragraphs.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TA

Task Achievement

7.0
Scoring rule

All required points are fully addressed with specific appreciation and a relevant improvement, while the formal purpose remains clear despite a few overly familiar expressions.

Next step

Keep the detailed praise but phrase the washroom suggestion more tactfully and explain the desired improvement with slightly greater precision.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

6.5
Scoring rule

The message moves logically from thanks through food, service, and atmosphere to the suggestion, but the absence of visible paragraphing limits readability.

Next step

Separate the opening thanks, detailed compliments, improvement request, and closing into distinct paragraphs.

LR

Lexical Resource

6.0
Scoring rule

The letter attempts a broad appreciative vocabulary, but several choices such as “homely appeal,” “excellent memoir,” and “ate up to their full stomach” are not idiomatic.

Next step

Prefer natural phrases such as welcoming atmosphere, memorable occasion, and ate until they were satisfied.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.5
Scoring rule

Many complex sentences are accurate and easy to follow, but agreement, pronoun reference, and punctuation errors recur in otherwise controlled writing.

Next step

Check compound-subject agreement, match pronouns to nouns such as “food,” and remove unnecessary internal commas.

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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1

You celebrated your birthday with some friends last week in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed the evening very much. Write a letter to the restaurant. In your letter:

- thank the restaurant for the successful evening

- mention the food, service and atmosphere

- suggest improvements that could make things better

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