You celebrated your birthday with some friends last week in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed the evening very much. Write a letter to the restaurant. In your letter: - thank the restaurant for the successful evening - mention the food, service and atmosphere - suggest improvements that could make things better

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Sample Response

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Dear Sir or Madam,

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I am writing to thank yousay thanks for organising a wonderful birthday party for us. It was a great evening with excellentfascinating arrangements and the credit goesthe credits go to you and your staff members. First of all, I would like to mention that the venue was so beautiful that it amazed my family and friends. The party hall was decorated with colourful lights and posters and the use of candles and flowers made the interior very attractivemade the interior worth looking at. We were impressed to see some unique paintings around the stage. The birthday cake that you provided was a highlight of the eveninga stunner - it could not have looked and tasted any better. During the main course, we were servedsevered platters which were immediate hits. I really appreciate the delicious menu we had that eveningwe have had that evening. Lastly, I recommend live music - which I believe will enhance the appeal of your restaurantincrease the worth of your restaurant. Sometimes you can invite bandsmusic bands to perform live music. Once again I am very thankful for your admirable services. Yours faithfully, Bilal Ahsan

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The letter communicates warm appreciation, gives vivid details about the food and atmosphere, and offers a relevant improvement in an appropriately courteous tone. The main weakness is that the service itself receives little specific description, while some word choices and the single body block reduce polish. Add a concrete service example, organise the points into paragraphs, and choose more natural collocations.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TA

Task Achievement

7.0
Scoring rule

The response thanks the restaurant, discusses the food and atmosphere, and suggests live music, although the service is only praised in general terms.

Next step

Add a specific example of attentive or efficient service to develop that required point fully.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

6.5
Scoring rule

The information follows a clear sequence and linking is easy to follow, but most content is compressed into one long body paragraph.

Next step

Group the atmosphere, food and service, and suggested improvement into distinct paragraphs.

LR

Lexical Resource

6.5
Scoring rule

The vocabulary is varied and expressive, but errors such as severed platters and increase the worth reduce precision and naturalness.

Next step

Check collocations and near-homophones, using served platters and enhance the restaurant's appeal instead.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0
Scoring rule

The writer uses a good mix of simple and complex sentences with generally accurate control and clear meaning.

Next step

Improve tense consistency and article choices in phrases such as the delicious menu we have had that evening.

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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1

You celebrated your birthday with some friends last week in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed the evening very much. Write a letter to the restaurant. In your letter:

- thank the restaurant for the successful evening

- mention the food, service and atmosphere

- suggest improvements that could make things better

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