You celebrated your birthday with some friends last week in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed the evening very much. Write a letter to the restaurant. In your letter: - thank the restaurant for the successful evening - mention the food, service and atmosphere - suggest improvements that could make things better
Sample Response
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to thank you for a fantastic and memorable evening for me and my friends at your restaurant. I would love to see you continue offering such an enjoyableappreciating dining experience to your guests and wish your business continued successwish remarkable success to your business. As you know, last week I celebrated my 27th birthday with my friends at your restaurant, and the evening was a great successat your restaurant which turned out to be a great success. Everyone enjoyed the poolside settingarrangement at the poolside and the sparkling light decorationsdecoration of sparkling lights with soft and soothing background music. Coming to the food, the presentation was as appealingmouthwatering as the food itself. The service was fabulous too. I am very satisfied with your hospitality. However, I have a suggestion to make. A few friends of mine attended my birthday party with their children. So if you could have added some interesting games for them that would have made the party more interesting. I believe it would be very helpfulconvenient for other people with children. I once again thank you for your admirable service. Yours faithfully, Mansoor Afzal
Why this response received Band 7.5
The letter fully addresses the successful evening, food, service, atmosphere, and a practical child-friendly improvement while maintaining a warm, suitably formal tone. Its main limitation is occasional awkward wording and a single-block structure that obscures the clear progression of ideas. The highest-priority improvement is to separate appreciation, event details, and the suggestion into distinct paragraphs while refining less natural collocations.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose is immediately clear, all three bullet points are well developed, and the appreciative formal tone suits a restaurant manager.
Frame the children's games idea as a future recommendation rather than as something the restaurant should have added to this past event.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas move logically from thanks through details to the suggested improvement, but the single-block presentation weakens paragraph-level organisation.
Use separate paragraphs for the positive experience, the food and service details, and the proposed improvement.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and expressive, although phrases such as appreciating dining experience and arrangement at the poolside are not fully natural.
Choose more idiomatic collocations such as enjoyable dining experience and poolside setting, and avoid repeating interesting.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of complex sentences is handled accurately overall, with a few awkward relative and conditional structures.
Use a consistent future-oriented conditional for the recommendation and clarify the antecedent in the sentence containing which turned out to be a great success.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You celebrated your birthday with some friends last week in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed the evening very much. Write a letter to the restaurant. In your letter:
- thank the restaurant for the successful evening
- mention the food, service and atmosphere
- suggest improvements that could make things better
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