Some people enjoy change, and they look forward to new experiences. Others like their lives to stay the same, and they do not change their usual habits. Compare these two approaches to life. Which approach do you prefer? Explain why?
Sample Response
Different people have different lifestyleslifestyle based on their own preferences and valuesaccording to their own preferences and values. Some prefer to have consistent routinessimilar life patterns to experiencefeel stability and comfort, whereas others seek new experiences to enrich their liveslook for changes to entertain and enhance their lives. Personally, I enjoy changechanges and always look forward to new experiences. This is because people learn new things by experiencing changechanges, and it helps people to adjust to the changing society. To begin with, by experiencing changes, people can acquirelearn new knowledge and information. Changes in life can includebe starting a new job, learning a new skill or transferring to a different schooltransferring to different schools. Even though these changes will be unfamiliar and difficult at first, during the process of adjusting to the change, individuals will be able to developupgrade their abilities, pick up a new skill and widen their horizons. For example, last year, I decided to go to the U.S. to study abroad. In the beginning, it was hard getting used to my new school and studying different subjects since the academic curriculum was so different from Korea’s education systemdifferent to my home country’s, Korea, system. However, as time went by, I was able to enhance my skills in speaking EnglishEnglish speaking skills and learn more about American culture and history. This experiencechange of studying abroad definitely helped me to broaden my perspectivewiden my perspectives and explore a different country. Thus, changes can help individuals to broaden their horizons. Furthermore, people must change in order to fit in with today’s society which is changing and developing every day. Nowadays, due to scientific development and discoveries, new technologies and mechanical devices are changing howchanging the style of how people live their lives. So people need to change and adapt to new technologiesadapt themselves to the new technologies so that they do not get left behind. To be specific, nobody writes their paper or report by hand these days, they use the computer and type in the words instead so that they can finish their work faster and make it more qualified. If people do not change and use the original method of completing their work by hand, they will not be able to catch up with the quality and speed of people who utilise new methods. Thus, people must change so that they can adapt to the changing society. In conclusion, through changes, people can learn new things and fit in with the developing society. In this regard, people should enjoy change in their liveshaving changes in their lives.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response presents a clear preference and supports it with relevant, extended examples, while its progression remains easy to follow. Its main limitation is that it barely examines the contrasting preference for stability, so the required comparison is incomplete; the highest-priority improvement is to develop why some people value unchanged routines and then compare those benefits directly with the advantages of change.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear preference is well supported, but the approach of maintaining stable habits receives almost no substantive comparison.
Develop one focused discussion of the benefits of stability and compare it explicitly with the case for change.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically through a clear introduction, two developed body sections, and a consistent conclusion.
Reduce repetitive concluding links such as 'Thus' and make the comparison between the two approaches guide the paragraph sequence.
Lexical Resource
The response shows a sufficient range for abstract discussion, although several collocations are imprecise or unnatural.
Use more natural combinations such as 'gain knowledge,' 'broaden perspectives,' and 'produce higher-quality work.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates meaning clearly, but agreement, article, and sentence-boundary errors recur.
Proofread plural agreement and possessive structures, and separate independent clauses instead of joining them with commas.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people enjoy change, and they look forward to new experiences. Others like their lives to stay the same, and they do not change their usual habits. Compare these two approaches to life. Which approach do you prefer? Explain why?
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