In some countries children have very strict rules of behaviour, in other countries, they are allowed to do almost anything they want. To what extent should children have to follow rules?
Sample Response
People in different countries follow and adopt different rules in dealing with their children’s behaviour. There are no laws for this made by any country’s government but this depends on the culture, values and people’s lifestylespeople’s live styles. The children who are the future of this world should be taught to follow a set of rules so that they are aware of what is goodaware what is good and what will be bad for them. The rules that are meant for their good should be followed in true spirit such as how to behavee.g. how to behave with parents, elders, teachers, friends, siblings, etc., because thesesiblings etc. as these are the manners that will help them to achieve success and they will ultimately transfer this to their children. These practices are passed and transferred from generation to generationfrom generations to generations so that the society develops morally and ethicallysociety is developed morally & ethically. Ethical and moral values are very important for any society and without these, a society cannot flourishnourish and go forward. Now if children don’t follow society cannot function properlythe rules the society it cannot run properly. AnxietyAnxiousness and anxiety will rule and people will be frustrated as their children instead of following rules are disobeying them. This will be reflected in people’s livesreflect in lives of people also and their life will be disturbed. I have seen families whose lives have been damagedwhose life has been destroyed as their children didn’t listen to them and revolted against their parents or eldersparents /elders. In the most developed nations children in the name of freedom of expression do not listen to their parents and leave them and ultimately the whole family suffers. But the children should have the right to ask about any rule they think is not correct and clarification should be provided to them so that they can accept the rule from their heart. The children should follow in true spirit the rules and regulationsregulation made by the society, parents, elders etc. Children don’t have enough maturity to decide what is right and wrongawareness to decide about the right and wrong and which rules will help them and which rule if not followed will get them in trouble. The society should explain the children the prospro and cons of rules so that children don’t consider the rules as weight on their shoulders and in fact feel proud when they are following the rules.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response maintains a clear view that children should generally follow rules while acknowledging their right to question them, which gives it a relevant central position. Its main limitation is that the extent of necessary strictness is not fully explored and the ideas become repetitive in one long paragraph; the highest priority is to define where rules are essential and where freedom is appropriate, then organize those points into distinct paragraphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The essay gives a clear view that children should follow rules, with some allowance for questioning them. However, it does not fully explore the extent or balance between strictness and freedom.
Define which rules children must follow and where they should have freedom, then explain why.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is one long paragraph, which weakens organization. Ideas are related but repetitive and sometimes run together.
Divide the essay into separate paragraphs for introduction, reasons for rules, limits on strictness, and conclusion.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate but repetitive, with errors in word form and collocation.
Use more precise words such as boundaries, discipline, independence, values, and consequences.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Many sentences are understandable, but there are frequent article, plural, preposition, and sentence-boundary errors.
Shorten long sentences and check noun forms such as lifestyle, pros and cons, and rules and regulations.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
In some countries children have very strict rules of behaviour, in other countries, they are allowed to do almost anything they want. To what extent should children have to follow rules?
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