Some people say that economic development is necessary to reduce the poverty in the world. Others say that economic growth should be stopped immediately to stop damaging the environment. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
Sample Response
People are divided on the role of economic development. Some opine that it is essential in addressing People are divided on the role of economic development. Some opine that it is essential in addressing poverty whereas others say that it should be stopped as it is causing irreversible damage to the environment. This essay intends to analyze both perspectives. I believeI personally believe that both arguments have meritweightage because poverty must be mitigated whileas poverty has to be mitigated, but saving the environment is equally importantalso equally important. ThereforeSo, we have to consider methods oflook into methods of sustainable economic development. Stopping economic development is not the way out.
It is irrefutable that by the development of economy people can improve their quality of life. For example, in developed countries, evendeveloped countries even the poorest of the poor havehas basic amenitiesthe basic amenities of life such as food, clothing and shelter. All the citizens enjoy a high level of social welfarehigh level of social welfare and receive free medical care and educationand they enjoy free medical care and free education. Even in countries like India and China, international companiesInternational Companies have created many jobs and as a result, economic development has accelerated even further.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response is strongest in establishing a clear opinion that sustainable development can reconcile poverty reduction with environmental protection, and it gives a relevant example of economic growth improving living standards. However, it is substantially under length and develops only the pro-growth side, leaving the environmental argument and a conclusion absent. The priority is to complete both sides with supported body paragraphs and restate the final position.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position and one relevant argument are present, but the environmental view is not developed and the response ends far below the required length without a conclusion.
Add a fully developed paragraph explaining environmental damage, then weigh both views and conclude with a specific sustainable-growth position.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction establishes the intended direction and the body paragraph develops one idea coherently, but the response is incomplete and contains distracting repetition.
Use a complete four-paragraph progression and remove the duplicated opening wording so each paragraph advances a distinct part of the discussion.
Lexical Resource
The response uses an adequate range of topic vocabulary, including language for poverty, welfare, and sustainability, although several collocations are unnatural.
Choose more natural academic phrases, such as economic development and both arguments have merit, and avoid awkward wording such as weightage.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Simple and complex forms generally communicate clearly, but article, agreement, and sentence-construction errors recur in places.
Proofread noun phrases and subject-verb agreement, and repair the duplicated opening fragment before finalising the essay.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people say that economic development is necessary to reduce the poverty in the world. Others say that economic growth should be stopped immediately to stop damaging the environment. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
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