To solve the ever-increasing environmental hazards throughout the world, the best way is to increase the price of fuel. What is your opinion on the above assumption?
Sample Response
Environmental or natural hazards are the results of physical processes that affect humans and the environmenthumans and environment every day and are harmful to bothand harmful for both in the short and long run. As the use of fuel increases to keep up with modern demands and population growthmodern demands and increased population, the world is becoming more vulnerable to environmental hazards and disasters. Floods, earthquakes, severe thunderstorms, toxic chemical or oil spillstoxic or oil spills immediately come to mind when consideringcomprehending this issue, implying that all these things are inherently hazardous.
One of the most effective solutions to these environmental hazards is to raise the price of fuel. The use of petroleum and gasoline can release toxic chemicals into our atmosphere. These chemicals escape into the air during refilling, from the gasoline tank and carburettor during normal operation, and from engine exhaust. Transportation sources account for about 30-50% of all harmful emissions into the atmosphere. IndustrialisationThe industrialisation is another reason for the emissionomission of harmful chemicals too.
“Smog” is another environmental hazard. It causes human respiratory stress and damagesrespiratory stress, and damages many plants, significantly reducing farm crop yields and the “health” of trees and other vegetation. Burning gasoline emits significant quantities of a wide range of harmful gases into the atmosphere. For example, carbon monoxide is a poisonous gas produced by incomplete combustion. Carbon dioxide, a normal product of burning fuel, is non-toxic but contributes to the greenhouse effect, which is also known as global warming and it is probably the most dangerous threat to human existencethe human existence.
Raising the price of fuel would mean that people would use less petroleum and gasoline. They would find alternative meansother alternative means of transport to save money, which would mean using less high-priced fuel for everyday purposes. For example, cycling is a healthy activity and it also benefits the environmentit saves the earth too. Also, for a long journey, people could try to find friends to carpool withfind friends together for car-pooling. Carpooling saves a lot of fuel and would save a lot of money too. But other things should be considered to reduce the use of these dangerous fuels. A government should implement strict rules on car userules of using cars, for instance, no fewer than four peoplefor instance no less than 4 persons should be allowed to travel in a single cardrive a single car. The price should be increased in a thoughtful way because if the price is so high it will hamper the average person's standard of livingaverage people's life leading. There are so many people whoyet use public transportationpublic transportation for movement and the increased price will make their life miserable. The prices of many daily necessitiesnecessary daily ingredients also increase with fuel priceswith the price of the fuel.
Many environmental hazards like “smog” and global warming are increasing around the world due to the excessive use of petroleum and gasoline in our daily lives. Raising the price of fuel could make all the difference to the environment. It would force people to use petrol in a more responsible way and use it less, and therefore be the most effective solution to the problem of ever-increasing environmental hazards though it might have some side effects but those can be controlled by the proper initiatives by the Government.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response presents a clear position and develops the environmental rationale, practical effects, and social drawbacks of higher fuel prices in considerable detail. However, the opening includes hazards unrelated to fuel, while several later points become repetitive or imprecisely expressed. The highest-priority improvement is to select only directly relevant evidence and express the policy’s benefits and limitations in tighter, more controlled sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear opinion is sustained and supported through detailed discussion of emissions, behavioural change, alternatives, and possible costs.
Remove unrelated natural-disaster material and evaluate more directly why fuel pricing would be more effective than other measures.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas are organised into a logical progression, though the long policy paragraph and conclusion contain some repetition and loose connections.
Divide extended discussion into more focused units and make each paragraph advance one distinct part of the argument.
Lexical Resource
A broad topic-specific vocabulary conveys detailed ideas, despite several inaccurate choices and awkward collocations.
Replace imprecise expressions such as ‘omission of harmful chemicals’ and ‘life leading’ with accurate, natural alternatives.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses varied complex structures, but recurring article, agreement, clause-boundary, and sentence-control errors reduce accuracy.
Shorten overloaded sentences and check that each dependent clause is correctly linked to a complete main clause.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
To solve the ever-increasing environmental hazards throughout the world, the best way is to increase the price of fuel. What is your opinion on the above assumption?
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